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Reviews For: The Regicide

wavesparkle7217 2008-05-21 ch 1,	abuseWhy is he no longer a wingleader?! He's amazing at it! I like the weyrling - he is truely the spirit of Pern. And you have been truly cannon, almost like reading a book by the owners... Your style is very Pernese, and the names and personalities fit. This is a great story so far, and I will be waiting with bated breath!
OnyxDrake 2008-01-27 ch 1,	abuseWow! You've had me on the edge of my seat. Thank you! It's an inspiration.
cathrl 2008-01-25 ch 1,	abuseNow this is real classy writing. Pro quality, no question. I've no idea on the actual practicality of the flight formations and so on, but you do a great job of making them sound technically plausible. And the accident is well thought through - and doesn't rely on someone being an idiot for it to happen. It did take me a couple of reads to figure out quite what happened, though. And it's still not quite clear to me why Gryth's rider wouldn't have him jump to the Weyr and just fly circles until someone arrives to guide them down. That's got to be safer than being here. I'm guessing something else happened, since F'ren had the same thought :) I'm struggling a bit with the backstory. Having read the three shorts, I know about one of the queens - but nothing about another one. The main qualm I have here is that Sh'vek is so strongly cast as Bad Guy. But he's Weyrleader. Does he really only have it in for F'ren, or is he downright unfair and vindictive in general? It just seems a bit unlikely that someone competent would continue to be like this, or that someone incompetent could carry on getting away with it, without some fairly major grumblings from more than just F'ren. Why didn't he just transfer to another Weyr years and years ago for the entirely plausible reason that his involvement in the initial deaths made his position with the kid's dad impossible? Why did Sh'vek even keep him around? Given the way he's been treated, even transfer in disgrace to another Weyr has to be preferable, and he'd have worked his way up by now. I'm thinking that there has probably been more going on here than meets the eye, and I do think you need to explain some of it to make the current setup work. I hope you don't mind me saying this - it's really a minor gut feeling of mine and I only mentioned it because otherwise this is so good. I've had much bigger qualms about "real" books! Much looking forward to more of this.
Morgan5318 2008-01-16 ch 1,	abuseAfter having read all of the ficlets with F'ren, I really have looked forward to this longer story. I understand having to wait for good fiction; I read the books when they first came out, and it was often YEARS between them. So, I'm patient enough to wait. (I think!) I agree about the Terran expletives, though I do believe the Pernese are familiar with use of the word "shit." I don't recall it being used in the books, but some situations call for nothing less than that particular word. This had to be one of the most incredible Thread-fighting scenes I've ever read, bar none. You certainly DO have a talent for writing PERN, yes, and I look forward to reading more of your work. Well done. Very, very well done.
Rena22 2008-01-15 ch 1,	abusean intriguing start. Can't wait to read more!
Starsinger 2008-01-15 ch 1,	abuseThis is good. I'd watch the use of Terran explitives, though. I don't think "shit" would be used by them, although, you never know.
truegold-dragonstar 2008-01-15 ch 1,	abuseThis is a great start. You have a few really strong characters - F'ren and Trath for a start, but O'reb and F'sigger both look look like they're going to bear watching. If either of them is just a minor characters, so much the better: in that case I'm impressed with the amount of detail and care you devote to incidental characters. The second thing that really impressed about this story was your sense of the practicalities of threadfall. I love the way your dragons pass tactical information and the detailed tactics and experience your dragon riders bring to the threadfall - it really gives a sense of a bunch of people who do a dangerous job, but are experts at what they do. Your Weyr has a sense of organisation and purpose that's often missing. Now for the nitpicks: I've only read one of the shorts that precedes this story, and I found that in some places it was very hard to follow. The obvious problem is this question of why Sh'vek (who I THINK is Weyrleader as well as Wingleader, but it wasn't quite clear...) hates F'ren. I appreciate you maybe meant that to be a surprise waiting in store, but there's one or two comments made ('Huh. Competition and prosperity...') which make me feel that I should know more of the history than I do. The other thing you do is introduce two queens, and then expect us to KNOW that Kiath is more senior than Linnebith - for a long time I kind of assumed that Kiath got the bad job because she was LESS senior. Anyway, nitpicks over... I really enjoyed this, and I'll look out for the updates! t-d
Renegade Elementalist 2008-01-15 ch 1,	abuseWow...just wow. That's by far the most intense Fall scene I've read, including the books. You have such a talent for writing Pern!

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