I think you've made a "Wizard of OZ Revisioned" fan-fic that is just as good as Tin Man. Also, making the Wizard the Villain; BRILLAINT. I'm thinking of making a Revison story myself, but not just with The Wizard of Oz, but Alice in Wonderland, Peter Pan, and Mabye Grimm's Fariy Tales as well. It will be set around parralell worlds with of a great War between Light (The Main Heroes and the supporting characters of the Stories.) and Shadow (The Main Villains of the Stories.). Well, Keep up the good work; because this story is GOLD!

Looks like your story is influenced by Wicked, with maybe a bit of The Lord Of The Rings tossed in. Elphaba is the not quite so Wicked Witch of The West and Glinda is her friend. Dorothy is going to the Wizard not to ask a favor of him but to destroy him. Your description of the Wizard does sound a lot like Saddam.

Read the first chapter. You are apparently retelling the classic story making Dorothy a modern teenager with a boyfriend and school troubles. No sign of Toto. By the way, four acres isn't really much of a Kansas farm. More like an extra big back yard. Multiply that by a hundred at least and we're talking business.

This is an excellent story! I love how you Wicked-fied it, but still kept it true to the original novel (with Nick Chopper. I really like how he's portrayed as well. Not completely metal, but still made of tin!) Please keep it coming!

I love the 2nd part you added to chapter 8 and the D.G thing was really cool. Please update soon i can't wait to see whats next

Elphaba has more reason to get involed now the wizard has her sister's body. If the wizard brings Nessarose back to get the slipers maybe Elphaba will be able to say what she always wanted to her sister. The only problem is the wizard needs to contol Nessarose. I kind of thought Nessarose can be used to hunt and get the shoes like the Ringwraith in the Lord of the Rings movie hunt for the One ring but the wizard could want the body for another reason. I think the witches helping Dorothy is a good idea. Looking forward to reading what happens in chapter nine so please update soon.

those chapters were awesome now the whole gangs together and the poor lion it sounds like he got the really bad end of the deal but Nick Chopper seems a little better off to me then in the real story he's still part human in this. I can't wait to see what happens when they get to the emerald city please update soon

this story is so cool soon the wizard will know who dorothy is will you make him know shes his dauther or if he'll attack with out knowing please update soon

I wonder what the wizard will do with Nessarose's body. I have an idea of a possible use but I will have to wait and see. Please update soon.

this story is so cool i can't wait to find out how dorothy reacts that the wizard is her father please update soon

I am glad you made Dorothy the wizard's daughter. I am looking forward to reading those four additional chapters you mentioned in your message.

I am glad you updated. Now they meet the Scarcrow and the Nick Chopper or the Tin man I wonder how they meet the Cowardly Lion. I hope you put something in the story to tell what happened to the Munckin village the soilders are coming to. I am looking forward to what happens in chapter 5 so please update soon.

I am kind of curious about what is the difference between sorceress and witches. I liked the meeting between Dorothy and the witches. I also liked how you used elements from Wicked to create a new version of the Wizard of Oz, and how you did the characters. Here are some ideas you can consider or view these comments as something that is just entertaining depending on what you wish to do with the wizard. Is the wizard the evil he seems or is he controlled/manipulated because he is possessed or there is a hidden outside evil that uses him as a puppet. You can decide to let the wizard be Dorothy's father or not. Maybe the wizard can be the evil Hitler like tyrant that Dorothy thinks he is or maybe there is more to the story like he is really a pawn who at the end realizes Dorothy is his daughter. If you do put the wizard as Dorothy's father he can be the cold hearted man and tyrant she thinks he is or the truth can be her father never got to make up with the woman he loved, marry her, and be her father like he could have decided on the hot air ballon because he got blown to Oz. If you decide to go with the idea that the wizard decided to be a father yet never could act on it he can chose to die protecting Dorothy which allows her to kill the evil or he can help Dorothy destroy the evil or something along those lines. The father could be killed with the evil or the father can be saved and have to get out of Oz. I am sure no matter if you chose to have the wizard the evil that is destorying Oz and its people or a pawn, or the father of Dorothy or not, how you do the wizard and what happens as a result is bound to be good. I wonder what surprises and curve balls await Dorothy and Mia on their adventure to the Emerald City. As you can tell I am really looking forward to reading what happens next so please update soon.

Too bad Daniel didn't land in Oz as well as Dorothy. I wonder if Dorothy will find her father in Oz or maybe her father isn't mentioned in this story. I love how you made this story and I look forward to what happens next so please update soon.