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| markman 1111 2008-06-26 ch 7,  | abusegood to see ya writin' again buddy i wouldve commented sooner but i went to camp but eh what can ya do huh? =P |
| Guffawer 2008-06-08 ch 6, anon. | abuseNice story so far Dspr! I like that Yellow Leader and Sapphire are starting to feel even a litle bit romantic. Please continue!! 9.9...9/10 |
| Draca Soubrette 2008-05-31 ch 6, | abuseConsidering that yellow Pikmin are my favorites, I have to say that I enjoyed this a lot. ^_^ It is a tiny bit confusing with the speaking parts, but I personally can overlook it. Plus, I feel you should write the Yellow Leader in the first person. You know, to get inside his head about what's going on. That's just my opinion, though; do whatever you want, my friend. XD |
| Killer raptor 2008-05-23 ch 4, | abuseAnother good chapter, though this one was kind of confusing(There were times when I couldn't tell whether you were talking about Olimar, Ruby or the Yellow Leader). Nice little take on how first timers tend to run into water with their pikmin. (The reason I am posting a review for ch.3 on ch.4 is because I accidentally posted my ch.1-2 review on ch/3, and doesn't let me post duplicate reviews. I will review ch.3 on my next review) |
| Biotendo 2008-05-04 ch 6, | abuseThis is a well writen story.It has turns and good description,But when you began to write in third person...well.It was better first person , where you could feel Yellow Leader`s emotions more(although the only wrong was swithing pionts of view to much). It is a well writen story none the less, and it handles well in third person view as well. Real awsome story. |
| Killer raptor 2008-04-18 ch 3, | abuseI can see why this is your best work. I've only read the first two chapters and some of the third, but still... good... |
| PenWraith 2008-04-18 ch 6, | abuseWho is ?? ...? |
| kenneth 2008-04-13 ch 6, anon. | abuseawsome man i think you should make it so that saphire kisses the yellow leader |
| markman 1111 2008-04-11 ch 6, | abuseWOT KEEP WRITING THIS WAS PURE AWSOMENESS |
| Ryxlet 2008-04-11 ch 6, | abusePoor Yellow Leader! I feel so sorry for him! Nice chapter, too. |
| Lex the Kitsune 2008-04-02 ch 5, | abuseNice fic, i got abit confused between Cirrus and Yellow Leaders names but it's pretty awesome. Can't wait untill the next chapter, -Lex. |
| Coroneter00 2008-03-25 ch 2, | abuseThis is an awesome fanfic! I can't believe Pikmin fanfics could be written so well. This is the true meaning of Pikmin, and this is just the first chapter. |
| Ender of Dragon 2008-02-25 ch 5, | abuseThis is my favorite story of yours. You should update it more often. It was well written, even if it was short. (You should also update In the Footsteps of a Monster.) |
| BrandonRC 2008-02-02 ch 4, | abuseNeither. ... Spectacular! (Strange. I've never used that word, before.) Suspensful! Superior in story to some of the fics that have forty or fifty chapters! (I won't say which.) My only suggestion, is to try to keep it at one or two POVs, or leave it at 3rd Person. I eagerly await your next chapter! |
| BrandonRC 2008-01-23 ch 3, | abuseA marvelous story! My only problem, is the fast pace, in which it goes. Still, keep up the good work! |