I wonder why you won't continue this.

Your point is very much shared by people all over the globe. I have been trying to be patient with myself and just sit and think through the stories I actually start.

I think this piece needs another chance because the theme is there; the flow is smooth. The grammar is in tact.

Please continue this. I think it'd be nice.

This is the only thing I founf to be erroneous:

“And what the hell difference does it make to you if I stay right here for the whole rest of the day?”

You should rephrase it.

Whole and rest together are quite redundant.

^^ Hey, there. I'm very curios as to where this story is going. Of course it was well-written (as short as that bit was), and.. "He clutched the sides of his head and mumbled, “Shut up…” How could a word that no one even spoke trigger the voice? The damned voice." Yea, that was perfect. -waits for more-