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| Gorgara 2008-05-07 ch 9, | abuseSo Ghidorah like most chips comes in three flavors. Dragon, Flood, and Horrors cool. Nice story can't wait to see what happens |
| killyzilly 2008-04-13 ch 9, | abuseHey, sorry for not reviewing vacation and what not. Great chapters, loved when Johnson referded to Telek as a Horror-possessed, drunken squid. Update soon |
| Blood Dragon JL 2008-04-05 ch 9, | abuseALL HAIL TO THE HIGH CHARITY MASTER THE INMORTAL GOLD DEMON. |
| arbiter070 2008-03-29 ch 8, | abuseyou know,i still cant believe that telek is being possesed by king...girodo?its bin a week since i read this. |
| arbiter070 2008-03-29 ch 9, | abuseso far this is farthest i read |
| Emperor K. Rool 2008-03-17 ch 9, | abuseFirst, let me appologize for not reviewing your earlier stories. I had not really known what exactly Halo was untill one day last December when I had a lot of time on my hands and was looking up stuff about it on Wikipedia. I got into the games and fanfics, but I decided since I hadn't reviewed the rest of this series, I probably shouldn't start with your version of the last game, but I have to say two things: 1)Mate,you've created the perfect rendition of the incredible portrayl of the equvivalent Sangheili, er Sangheili equivalent of Cap'n Jack Sparrow.Savy? 2)Run! It's Gojira! Vote Mothra in 2556. I like Telek and the way you've made Gravemind an evil Dragon King. Keep up the good work! |
| cHr0n0sPh3r3 2008-03-15 ch 9, | abuseUh oh? Crazy Possessed Admiral/Imperial Admiral Versus Arbiter? Bring it on! |
| nightdragon0 2008-03-15 ch 9, | abuseIf there's one thing, it's made clear that Telek's form of 'flood immunity' is rather different from Johnson's. Speaking of that, should Johnson really be the one asking about how Telek got 'possessed' when he himself has been in close contact with the flood (in Halo 1). Though Johnson might not actually be aware of his own immunity, considering the way it's told in the First Strike novel. Hmm, why would Cortana's voice be sounding out to Telek? I'd assume Chief has a certain connection to her, which is why it was happening to him in-game. The Cortana voice about the 'coin's fault' is one of the secret ones from the terminal or something, was it? It's nice that you link that statement up to Chief's luck, although I've heard the quote is supposed to be referring to how Dr. Hasely selected John for the spartan program when he was a child on reach (by tossing a coin and John guessing it right each time, if I recall correctly, in the Fall of Reach novel). |
| cHr0n0sPh3r3 2008-03-12 ch 8, | abuseBig explosions, lots of shooting and fire = Very fun Keep going, cant wait till you try for the end |
| Half-Jaw 2008-03-12 ch 8, | abuseAnother great chapter. I love it. I have to say the part “Knock, knock, you Drinol humpers. Uncle Telek wants in.” had me rolling with laughter. Update soon please. |
| nightdragon0 2008-03-12 ch 8, | abuseTelek and Arbiter's little debate about who gets to kill Truth was actually quite amusing. I thought the dialogue here flowed quite nicely, even with the additional ones and blending in the original. There's just something a little odd towards the end. The focus was more on Telek and Manda talking about the situation in the middle of the chapter, then it shifts to Chief and Arbiter at the end, mainly because they're the two left on the scene. But I'm assuming the decision Chief made (about lighting the ring) was an impromptu one, at least in the context of this fic. Thinking about it, after Miranda's death in the original, there was no one established as commanding the UNSC forces, and Chief was free to do what he thought was best. Though it's unlikely he was the highest ranked soldier remaining, seeing as he's an NCO, he was the one who understood the situation best. Here there's still Telek and possibly Kiryuu. If Kiryuu was on the ship with Miranda, I'm wondering why he didn't come out with her. |
| cHr0n0sPh3r3 2008-03-10 ch 7, | abuseTank beats everything! Yeah good chapter keep it going, lol really did you have to make Wago do that? |
| Half-Jaw 2008-03-10 ch 7, | abuseOne of your best chapters yet. I have to say there were too many funny parts for me to reference just one. I did however like the nit picking between Telek and Johnson. Esoecially the reference to driving the Scarab drunk and Manda giving Telek a ticket. I live it. Update soon please. |
| Half-Jaw 2008-03-10 ch 6, | abuseI love it. I have to say Telek callinf the President an XBOX was great. Update soon please. |
| Xeno Major 2008-03-10 ch 7, | abuseThey are REALLY not going to let Telek forget the Scarab incident are they? |