I LOVE this story. It's just so good. Well-written and well thought. An awesome, awesome guild line story that isn't a regurgitation of the game. And with little nods to lore and other quest lines. I crave more, Logius. Please, keep it up. It's good to know someone does a lot of homework before writing. I'll be waiting.

Okay, so it took me a little while to get round to reading your other story, but I did get here eventually, and... wow. What can I say? Quality story, had me on the edge of my seat, made me laugh, made me worry... and made me all soppy at the end of this chapter...
Brilliant characters, excellent plot, and a great idea to tie the stories together. Keep going...

I knew it! I recognized that tiara from Sister of Shadows and the Razor...my god that was cool to tie up the stories like that...

I read all nine chapters in one sitting, even though I have a math exam tommorow morning; just to show you how enthralled I was by the story.

It's really a shame that there aren't more writers who write stories about mages. Thank you for answering my prayers.

(c:

K this story...needs to continue. Don't worry, take your time...hurry up! XD

This is one of the few fanfictions that I still bother to read (and enjoy).

Wow this is really good havents managed to take my eyes of it the last hour or so its great, i hope theres more to come!

Overall, a very enjoyable read...although I think you actually went to just the opposite extreme with the battle scene. Maybe a longer battle with the SHAMAN would have done some good, but overall I felt you told us about too much of the battle. I would have perfered if the time-frame of the combat was smaller, but more emotionally charged. I had half a mind to skim through the battle...

HOWEVER, I must say the rest of these two chapters was superb. Roland and Attlan seem a lot more...real than they did at the beginning of the story, and their interactions are thoroughly funny. I admit I still sometimes get them mixed up, but whatever. Plus, you still do an excellent job getting into their heads and letting us understand their feelings for most of these two chapters.

About chapter length: it might just be me. I have a rather short attention span, and am one of the few reviewers who rarely reads a whole story at once.

Wow, long chapter again. In all honesty, reading that much in one sitting can make me feel a little mush-brained no matter how good the story is, so I guess I'll continue to review two-by-two.

I'm still impressed. I really like your emotional description, and the dialogue between the characters makes me chuckle. You also excellently capture the ambience of the places you write about.

Funny, but you've actually made a clannfear seem rather cute in this story...even as it's cracking the bones of its enemies. Kudos for that, although I don't see the same kind of connection with Toth described in the story. Is that intentional?

As a really minor gripe, I've noticed that there are a few times in the story where you seem to treat the reader like an idiot. For example, when you note "He was now bigger and smaller things don't fit bigger people." But, again, these instances are few and far between. For the most part, your style is superb.

Anyway, as before, I shall read the rest later.

That fight was awesome, can't really find anything wrong. And I agree, UESP rocks. Keep it up.

Very good story.

I don't have time to read more right now, given the length of your chapters, so I figured I'd just review these two chapters and come back to the rest of the story later.

You do I really good job writing mage characters: you make it clear how useful magic can be, and do a good job of explaining how one feels using it. That's excellent.

Also, you seem to get inside the heads of the characters very well (descriptions of emotions and such). Though I kind of think it would have worked better if they had more INITIAL feelings about killing those bandits, I did like having one of the character vommit and reflect after it was all over.

The one significant problem, IMO, is that the characters don't really feel individual enough. Sure, they disagree about things, but they have no recognizable speech patterns, making it easy to forget who said what. Sometimes, at least in the first chapter, they feel kind of artificial.

Also, there were some moments where it wasn't clear what was happening: for example, when did Attlan get injured? Also the scene where he was firing a "barrage of missles" (arrows) at the bandit didn't seem right for close-quarters combat. It takes a significant amount of time to simply fire one arrow from a single bow. But still, scenes like that are the exception, not the rule, in this story.

All in all, though, a promising fic. I'll read more later.

I felt the battle was more than adequate in length. It's hard putting in writing what happens in less than 30 seconds in the game, particularly when you have to coordinate the actions of all the characters.

I'm quite impressed by the characterization in this story, I certainly have taken a few tips from your writing. I also like how you set the rules for the magic system. Makes the story that much more immersive.

Can't wait until the next chapter!

Excellent work. A very enjoyable read. :)

Great story so far. =)I look forward to reading more of your work soon.

Ugh, didn't tell me when this story updated! [It was supposed to.]
I like reading about these two.
And, of course, plays by Crassius Curio.