:D This was great. I love how you brought Kilobyte back into the story--really nice use of the character. I also enjoyed the moment where Fear's minions appear again--it's a great image, like in ep 26. And the description of Sparx trying to run on the melting ground. I think perhaps you could have ended her section without saying she saw the others, to make it seem a little more suspenseful before she inevitably turns up and unleashes SoJ power on the multi-minion thing ^_^.

Aww, Rat. His banter's nice.

And Lord Fear walking out there. His reminiscences were fascinating to read--and this kind of ending for him... XD I think it needs some follow-up in the next chapter, though, because I'm not convinced he's dead without learning more about the scene. :P

Lovely as usual. Your writing's great.

Wow! :D Oh, Scarab, I'm so very, very happy.

I love how you described the nothingness at the beginning, the simile of the painted glass and the long description of the imagery: "Capricorn trees were twisting in between the remnants of a merry go round pony with the body of a skeleton."

Chuck and the pop culture references XD. That was cool!

Also liked the Rat. And the byplay about "high brow entertainment"--hilarious! :D

Then Sparx--go Sparx. She's great.

And Mark and Tyran and Lady Illusion. I really like how you managed that emotional conversation without becoming bogged down in the minutiae of it; you made it fascinating and great to read, always flowing nicely.

Random fixing the shield was also a great moment to lighten the flow--a bit of humour. :D I'm really liking the Random/LI interactions too.

And a very serious ending indeed. You rock, Scaraby--this fic is wonderful. Thank you for writing it. Sorry this review is such a disjointed collection of impressions; I loved this chapter. Incredible work.

Yay! Another chapter! Loved it. Keep up the good work!

BRILLIANT!...I think thats all that needs to be said really

You don't want to *know* how many times I re-read your last bits. :D You are seriously outstanding as a writer. Count me in shock and awe.

I really liked the Vow. The description of the magic--and the harshness of it. Sparx'll be fighting for her redemptive path in the future, and now LI for her freedom. Being bound to Ace like Lord Fear is one of few things that could poison that relationship. This was really, really *good*--chilling and border-dark and very, very impressive.

An' this whole thing is making me squee like crazy. ^_^

It is quite good so far, Scarab and I like the fact that it is based in the game. I am confused though too, since I never read the roleplay (not to mention I wasn't allowed to play in it.) Who is the voice in Mark's head?

Yay! An update! Honestly, you could practicaly SEE the cobwebs building up. Any way, good story, lots of suspense. Please don't make this one o the -many- stories that have been abandoned. I really like this one.

3 updates in one day. wish everyone updated that fast. :P
The last chapter was intriguing. made me want to read more.

I loved reading the roleplay so its cool to see something new to do with it. how many chapters do you think this is likely to be?