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Milarca mouse 8/12/10 . chapter 1
So nice, I liked all the Black and white metaphors :)
MochaCocaFan 9/4/08 . chapter 1
Very eloquent and a good piece altogether.
AndersonX 7/7/08 . chapter 1
Very nice and sweet with only a little bit of sectioning problems, but otherwise, I especially liked the character development with finding things that are both black and white. Meaningful.
Sandshrew777 2/25/08 . chapter 1
I was thinking that perhaps you were going to work in a Molly arc in that she was colorblind, in a sense, to Micah. I'm quite glad with what I ended up with, instead.

Sorry. I had a plot bunny that I had to go exercise. Poor things get too many carrots. :p

But you don't know that I broke from my review, eh? So I'll just shut up and move on.

I love your dialogue. It works on a poetic and realistic level all at once that works from a child's point of view. Your Niki (not Jessica!) is superbly in-character. I hear her speaking these words.

(Also, that third grader? How delightful she was as a character. Totally right.)

I think Micah is a little under-hitting his perception and wisdom that he's garnered in the series. While I'm not a fan of the "child knows everything because he sees it from the bottom-up" idea, I think you needed a bit more of it here to fit his canon persona. He just seems a little too innocent.

Then again, the piano scene rectifies this. Micah has to work things out. He's a doer. The dictionary scene mirrors this. Micah has a problem, is bemused, but comes up with a solution by doing something about it. Good, good, good.

You also tiptoe over the use of his powers. Another excellent choice. This isn't about powers, this is about the self. Good for you!

Really, I loved this point of view and idea. I think you could have done a little more with Micah's state of mind in that he's a bit too guileless, but this is all two years prior to our first sight of him. He most certainly has changed in that span.

Brilliant work.

Keep writing!
TorryLover 2/12/08 . chapter 1
Very good story, keep up the good work! :)
Ladywilde 1/22/08 . chapter 1
This was just great. You did a really beautiful job with this and you got Micah down perfectly. I loved this - beautiful descriptions and the end was lovely. I like seeing Micah embrace who he is - and his family and a be a stronger, better person because of it. Just wonderful.
jamesmitchell1986 1/21/08 . chapter 1
Quite good I enjoyed it I am a white man who is very attracted to black women and seeing the episode of oprah today gave me hope of someday meeting a woman who can look past the social morays and accept the fact that the size thing is a myth and fall in love with me for me and my crazy self.
ka-mia2286 1/21/08 . chapter 1
I just wanted to say thank you for this story. It hits very close to home for be as like Micah, I'm biracial. My mom's black and my dad's white. This story touches so much upon the feelings I had to endure when I was younger.

Again thanks for the story. It was wonderful
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