 itsi3 2009-02-08 . chapter 34What sequel?
I LOVED it!
There were some very memorable and powerful scenes! I only got a chance to copy 2 of them so here they are:
Chapter 13:
Jayden came into the living room, flopping down onto the couch, exhaling loudly. Derek glanced over at him, raising an eyebrow at his apparant frustration, but when Jayden continued to pout at the floor, he shrugged, and turned back to the TV. If the kid wasn't going to talk, he sure as hell wasn't going to force it out of him. He hated having to deal with emotions, unless absolutely necessary, and this was one of those cases that he could avoid it, unless Jayden brought it up.
His eyes had only been fixed on the TV for all of two seconds when Jayden shot straight up in his seat, glaring at Derek.
"Don't you know what an exhilerated sigh means? It means I've got something on my mind! Fix me!"
Epilogue:
"Not funny, Derek!"
He stopped laughing long enough to nod his head, struggling for air.
"It looked pretty funny from down here actually," he told her, and she only turned redder. "Here's the deal, babe. You may cook me food, kiss me, and clean up after me, but I keep you on your feet, not to mention keep your gaurd up."
"By smacking me in the head with a pillow?"
He shrugged, still grinning.
"What can I say?" he challenged, superiority in his voice. "When you got it, you got it. And I got it in all the right places, baby."
She rolled her eyes, acting disgusted with him as he laughed at her.
"You're an egotistical loser," she said, but she was grinning as she hit his shoulder to try and get him to stop laughing at her. "Derek! Give it up. It's not funny anymore."
"If it wasn't funny, I wouldn't be laughing."
He did, eventually, stop. It took about four smacks to the side of the head, a couple of threats to not kiss him for a week, and a good lecture about she hoped his laughter could keep him company at night for him to finally give it up, but he stopped.
But there was so much more that I just LOVED!
Awsome job!! Very addicting plot and writting!!
~Crystal |
 jacksparrowluva12 2008-08-31 . chapter 20Really good story, lots of drama, and the characters are really believable. Props to you for being able to make up good storyline's to all three stories (from the trilogy).
Also, when does Derek tell her Casey she didn't want another kid? They were visiting Jeff, yes, but what chapter?
Thanks, good story again. :) |