This was a fun one, I enjoyed seeing Chloe being so playful and the bit with Clark's heat vision was cute. Nicely done.

HEHE. Very cute! I loved the x-ray scene! Classic!

It was a cute story, but a lot was lot in translation, unfortunately. There are a lot of grammar errors, as well as some spelling/wrong wrong issues going on. For example, you kept switching tenses, from the present to the past and back again. Also, the characters weren't in-character. For example, Clark has issues with sex, and suddenly he's jumping into bed with Chloe at the end of the story? Although I know it wasn't intentional, you made Clark and Chloe come off, well, very stupid. Suddenly declaring their love for one another after an exchange of flowers just wasn't flattering to either character, I'm afraid.

I'd recommend that you read some collections of short stories. That'll give you some tips on how to structure a short story. Also I would recommend investing in a good grammar book. And, before you publish a story, just proof-read and think to yourself, 'Is this possible, given what we know about the characters?' You can take the characters a bit outside the box, but to do this, you do need to have an excellent handle on plot, characterization, and writing structure.

I loved the story and I feel that if you are needing something everyone will shop at walmart one day or another, plus they do have professional clothes like the George collection

I feel the grammer was perfect and it was really short but a ficlet normally is.

Nice work :)

Well, what can I say?
First, Chloe Sullivan wouldn't get her clothes from Wal-Mart, the characters were so OOC, it was hard to belive it, the plot was...original, and the whole text was lacking grammar and was rushed.

I liked this story! It was really cute and the ending was funny! Really great job!