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| ilexx 2008-05-11 ch 11,  | abuseTerrific how you described the trap and Dean's thoughts while subjected to it. Needless to say, I loved the "It's always easy"-line. |
| squid109 2008-05-11 ch 11, | abusePoor Beka. Sacrificing the Maru would be like a mother sacrificing one of her own children |
| squid109 2008-04-29 ch 10, | abuseSometimes getting the images in your head to the keyboard is te hardest part. You're doing fine |
| ilexx 2008-04-28 ch 10, | abuse"Alright Dean - I'll be honest with you," Beka lied. LOL So very much Beka, the perfect, veteran con artist. I'm very eager to see her plans A, B, C and D unfold. (And I thoroughly enjoy your characterisation of Dean. He sounds like a very subtle mixture of Tyr and Peter... with a nice shot of Valmont to him, as well.) |
| squid109 2008-04-19 ch 9, | abuseI really liked the bit about Beka as a young girl and "Authorization Don't let my daughter do something stupid" Actually the entire portion there with Beka and Rommie thinking back on what the Maru meant to them was moving. |
| ilexx 2008-04-19 ch 9, | abuseThe Beka/Ignatius scene was terrific, with Beka already being sort of an Ignatius en miniature... Great! |
| ilexx 2008-04-13 ch 8, | abuseGreat chapter (long one, too)! At first I wanted to quote a few lines, but there are too many of those I liked extremely well. The ending is of course terrific. I'm very much looking forward to more. |
| squid109 2008-04-13 ch 8, | abuseI see Dylan is his usual sympathetic self around Beka 'You've got another ovary tucked inside you' Of course he didn't mention that another pride might want that one. "That went well. She didn't shoot you' |
| ilexx 2008-04-04 ch 7, | abuseI'm always a bit worried when Trance starts to miss futures... |
| squid109 2008-04-03 ch 7, | abuseNicely done. The chapter ended on several ominous notes that make me wonder what's ahead for the crew. Nice bit of Trance/Harper interplay as well. |
| OlderFan 2008-03-18 ch 6, | abuseWow! I just discovered this story and it is realy good so far. Will Beka finally choose Dylan? Why is Trance so worried about Beka surviving? Please update soon. |
| squid109 2008-03-16 ch 6, | abuseThat seemed too easy almost as if Dean wanted her to shoot him |
| ilexx 2008-03-16 ch 6, | abuseI knew she wasn't exactly needing Dylan after all. |
| ilexx 2008-03-04 ch 5, | abuse"hopefully Dylan would stop sending her on errands easily done by someone less important" Ha! Wonderful! |
| squid109 2008-03-03 ch 5, | abuseAh ha we finally learn how Beka met Dean. I liked the lines about 'if the invitation arrives,..' and 'he's not that great..' I would have liked have seen some more about what Dean looked like other than dark eyes and their initial conversation and the 'invitation'. Still a worthwhile read. |