 The Forsaken Girl 2008-05-03 . chapter 10Hey there again! I came for the sake of reviewing, and I must say, these drabbles are just so cool =D ... I love how the drabbles I requested turned out... they're wonderful! And #58 is wonderful. I love hitsuzen; it makes me wish it was real...(or maybe it is? xD) One line in #58 about Fai's worth just explains exactly how I think Fai feels...
"He would never bring dishonor to Kurogane’s sacrifice by proving himself unworthy of it."
This is most likely how Fai feels in this point of the story, since I don't think he would think himself worthy after so many years of self-loathing, but he would try to make himself worthy so Kurogane's sacrifice wouldn't be for nothing...It's a lovely line =)
And #59...ah, your favorite! I don't know how I thought of this one up, but I'm happy you liked it! It portrays the two very well as young kids...
"Sakura may well be the death of him, he decided, but that was something he was oddly okay with it."
This line just screams foreshadowing to me...heck, Syaoran (Clone or Original) may not even die, but I have a feeling C!Syaoran might... I dunno, but that line just sent shivers up my spine...
Overall, the drabbles were great, and I look forward to another update! |
 The Forsaken Girl 2008-04-27 . chapter 9Hi there! Well, I'm a lurker who really, really likes this story... and therefore, I reviewed to hopefully give you some ideas for the drabbles... I just checked my mail in the morning and saw you updated the story, so I was all happy, and then you said you needed help, so I thought for the whole day for some nice stories that have been drifting around in my head... and now I'm reviewing at 9 in the night (in my time) after writing down my ...prompts, I suppose?
I really hope you like long reviews, because this is going to be REALLY long, even though I only thought of 8 drabbles... I'm not good at making my thoughts concise, so I'm sorry for the rambling... =) so I have 8 drabbles, none of which you have to write, but I needed to get them out of my head... I've never posted a story before, and I'm scared of butchering them, and I know you are an awesome author (I probably read all of your TRC fanfics, but never reviewed them...sorry!) so I'll just give you my ideas for storage...
I'm a kurofai fan, so most of these are kurofai, though I really worked hard into finding some syaoran and sakura works... ok, stop rambling, onto the drabble suggestions!
1. Tomoyo POV- In the Nihon arc, her thoughts on Kurogane and Fai... I'm fond of the relationship Kurogane and Tomoyo have as brother and sister, so I would like to see a story like that... Tomoyo's a hard person to characterize well, though, isn't she? Oh well, I have faith in you =) The angst has killed me in the recent chapters, so I thought of this as mildly fluffy, but not too much...
2. Fai POV- Nihon arc,after chapter 167, where Fai wakes up from a nightmare while sleeping in a chair next to Kurogane's bed... and Kurogane, being the cool guy that he is, just pulls Fai into the bed and tells him to rest...I'll leave it to you for what happens afterwards and Fai's thoughts and etc... though this story's rating is T, right? shame... XD
3.Kurogane POV- I love Kurogane's insight on Fai, even though its a bit overused...but I don't think this has been addressed before...it's about the term "mage" after the events of chapter 169... since Fai obviously isn't a mage anymore... I'm imagining a fluffy setting, where Fai's sleeping and Kurogane's staring at him and all that fluff... =D
4. Syaoran POV- At last! This one's angsty, because this couple is getting so angsty it breaks my heart... =(... anyways, I was thinking in the Infinity Arc, after Fai stabs Sakura, R!Syaoran's thoughts on that...it may be just me, but I haven't read enough fics about THAT particular "death"...
5. Fai POV- Angsty comforting stuff... got reminded of this after thinking of #3... Infinity Arc, after Fai stabs Sakura, and thinks of hurting himself with the sword, but Kurogane stops him... I'm thinking of some kind of conversation between them, where Kurogane's not trying to give him comfort, but gives him the facts(like that it wasn't his fault) which is somewhat comforting... though Fai couldn't get that through his head at that point in time... >_<
6. Syaoran POV- another Syaoran and Sakura! I dunno if you've read chapter 188 yet, but under the assumption that you have (and sorry if you haven't!) I was thinking of R!Syaoran's thoughts on R!Sakura (the one he's been with all the time) and his price to save her (his time)... this may be a hard fic to write unless you have more information, but I'll give you the idea nonetheless... =)
7. Kurogane POV- another insight fic! this one's on Fai's sleeping position if you've read the omake of it... if you haven't, well, basically, Fai sleeps on his stomach (like me!! XD) and Mokona wonders how he can breathe like that... I'm thinking Kurogane knows of Fai's moderately suicidal tendencies, so it seems like he's trying to suffocate himself in his pillow or, better yet, trying to hide his face from the world since that's the only time his mask's completely gone... this one can go fluffy or angsty (or flangsty! haha) so I'll leave it to you...
8.Syaoran POV- I'm not sure if this is the clones or the real ones, but this is basically a memory as little kids... Sakura comes over and asks Syaoran if he likes her because mean Touya-nii-sama says she's too annoying for Syaoran to like her... and of course, Syaoran's all "everyone in Clow loves you Sakura-hime!" but Sakura wants to know if SYAORAN likes her... you can end the conversation anyway you want... make those dinner bells ring again, or let Syaoran confess or something else totally creative that I cant think up... this could be fluffy, but if Syaoran's thinking back on it, it seems angsty...
And that is it! wow, this is long... you can ignore all of these, use all of them, use some of them, do whatever with them, I don't care... I'm just happy I finally reviewed... So far, I have reviewed 3 stories!! and I may review again if I have anymore plot bunnies in my head and you need some more ideas... I'm happy to be of any assistance... and now, I shall stop talking, I mean writing, so much... Oh yeah! I never reviewed, did I? I think it goes without saying that this story is amazingly good and just wonderfully written...you have the character's personality spot-on...personal favorite... #18... =D
and that's my review... long, isn't it? I hope I helped! |