kick ass

My first-read AC fic. Love the game. The dialogue could be fleshed out. Not everyone likes straight dialogue. That stated, I was amused at Santiago (the character I most often play) in all caps.

Not very good

If it was meant to be funny, you did great. If not, it was funny. I loved it all, just wished it was longer.

Your here! Yay!

I really liked it. You have introduced the characters well, without to much babble and the entire thing reads fantastically well. It is very fluid and just rolls infront of the eyes. I really like the way you write and I really hope you keep up this high standard as this fic needs to be regularly maintained.

Well Done.

Dan