Bant is my hero!

Great story! Keep up the good work:)

Story is original and well written ; not tipe i prefer but fine work non the less ;
ps:epilogue is definitely best.

I absolutely adore this story. But I have to ask, killjoy that I am, what happened to Anikin? Was he picked? Who trained him? Did he still go evil?

The really relevant parts were all answered though. Obi and Qui have a better relationship over all, and hopefully Qui isn't as big a dummy in the future.

Thanks for writing this lovely fic!

PLEASE UPDATE VERY GOOD IT IS!

Ani Unduli

Aww! I loved this! I think I now like the Obi-gets-angry thing instead, it gets them worked up and upset more, more fun for me to read! Thanks so much!

This story is WONDERFUL and I absolutely adore your Bant!
Thank you so much!

I loved it, one of my all time favorite Star Wars fics!

Loved the fic. I just read the whole story in two days. sorry I did not get to post a suggestion about the plot. I thought that Qui-Gon would help Obi wan pass them take Ani as his padawan.

Obi wan finds say a child that was the opposite of himself, more like xan. when things get tough as the master qui-jin and obi get back together. sometimes you have to be in charge to find out what it is like to be responsible for someone else.

Great story.!! I had to read till the end, wish there was more>

I think the ending was perfect.

Ahah. Thank you for such a lovely story! It was such a pleasure to read! I absolutely love how you write Bant, she's just great, and hilarous, as is the epilouge. Ahah. Loved how she overdosed 'Bratakins' on chocolate. lol

You did a superb job of writing how Qui-gon comes to have the revelation that he has been blinded for the past couple of weeks. Awesome job.

Loved the way you ended this, you've done a splendid job.

Thanks for writing! I enjoyed reading this story! Do you plan on writing any other Qui/Obi (non slash) fic in the future? Personally, I think you should. lol. Anyway, thanks again for writing! :D

Aw right - Obi-Wan got his feelings recognized and to think it took Anakin to get through to Qui-Gon, to wit:

[quote]'Qui-Gon Sir, so-so glad you chose me,' he struggled to keep his eyes open, 'chose me to be your padawan.' With that the boy rolled over asleep again.

Qui-Gon's indulgent smile faded off his face, replaced with sudden doubt. Anakin wasn't his padawan, 'Chose me to be your padawan', that's what the boy had said. Obi-Wan was his padawan, at least until he passed his Trials and became a knight. With those words still fresh in his mind, a cold feeling swept over him. Obi-Wan's sudden desire to pass his Trials, his reluctance to talk to him, to meet his eye or even be in his presence. Countless images of Obi-Wan's face came swiftly to his mind, how could he have missed it? Qui-Gon turned a desperate gaze on the door, his forehead creased in a realisation that was too late. Again he wondered how he could have missed it, missed everything. His apology for neglecting Obi-Wan in the days after Anakin's acceptance seemed so pathetic and ineffective. And it had cost him his padawan. It had gained a new one, but quietly as he shifted his gaze to Anakin's sandy blonde head he realised he would rather see ginger.

Qui-Gon slowly released his breath and sank down onto the couch. The springs creaked tiredly as Qui-Gon's solid weight landed on the cushion, a small plume of dust rose into the air that spoke of months without cleaning. The Jedi master leaned his elbows onto his knees and wearily passed a hand over his face. How does one apologise? For so many things? Qui-Gon suddenly felt very old and tired. [/quote]

Wonderful job of dawning realization.

I really liked this:

[quote]The footsteps stopped beside his bed and a heavy sigh sounded in the dark silence, a warm weight descended to rest Obi-Wan's frozen cheek, turning his face gently from the pillow. Obi-Wan slowly opened his eyes and stared into a pair of tired blue eyes, framed by dozens of small lines of stress and sadness. Obi-Wan stared calmly back without speaking, Qui-Gon's eyes slowly filled with tears and he pressed his hand tightly against Obi-Wan's still cheek with a small quiver. Nothing changed in Obi-Wan's expression, then his face suddenly twisted and he hurled himself forward. Ignoring the flare in his shoulder, he buried his head into Qui-Gon's neck with a bitter cry. Arms wrapped around his back and held him tightly, one shaking hand moved to hold the back of his head and Qui-Gon sobbed silently. Tears streaked down Obi-Wan's face, he wasn't sure whose they were. Qui-Gon's entire form shook with remorse as he held his padawan.

'Why?' Obi-Wan choked out desperately.

There was no spoken response from Qui-Gon, only an increase in the grip around around Obi-Wan's back and the sound of continued crying.

'Someone should have explained I can't have everything I want, padawan,' Obi-Wan grinned shakily through his tears at the thought flowing across their long disused mind-link.

'You still wanted me as your padawan?'

'I didn't realise how you would take it, I'm so,' Qui-Gon drew a shuddering breath, 'so sorry. Anakin can be trained by someone else.'

'You do want me as you padawan though?' Obi-Wan felt a fleeting feeling of dread.

'Yes!' Qui-Gon pulled back Obi-Wan's head to meet his downcast eyes, 'yes! And it should be me asking whether you want me as your master!' A flicker of apprehension crossed his damp eyes as he looked into Obi-Wan's guarded ones.

There was what felt like a long stretch of silence as Obi-Wan stared through the dim light at Qui-Gon's anxious face. Then with a sharp crack, Obi-Wan narrowed his eyes and slapped Qui-Gon firmly across the side of the face. Qui-Gon closed his eyes and made no movement. Obi-Wan's face erupted into a grin and he roughly pulled his master into a hug. There were no more words spoken, only a grateful sigh from Qui-Gon. [/quote]

Wonderful job - but who trains Anakin? Will Obi-Wan be a padawan forever?

aw how aborable! -squee- i loved it!

I must say I liked the sstory but it left many many questions unanswered. Good story, Not a good ending.