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| Keggers 2008-05-08 ch 1,  | abusePlease update this! |
| The Unrealist 2008-01-30 ch 1, | abuseI like this. Although, maybe you'd want to make each "day" longer, like a 24-hour account of everything that happened that day, and submit each day as an individual chapter? I suppose this is 2142? If so, you may want to add some descriptions of vehicles and equipment - I'm not sure what you mean by hovercraft, there aren't any in 2142. Overall very good so far, keep it up. |