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DeidaraIsGod2009
2009-11-04 . chapter 1
Hilarious. FREAKIN HILARIOUS!! Great work.
Tongues
2009-09-09 . chapter 19
This was beautifully written and I expect the sequel will be just as good. A few things you should look out for though:
- Make sure to run every chapter through your spelling and grammar check if possible. Overall this was pretty good but there were some parts where the sentences simply made no sense.
-Give perhaps a little more exposition on the other characters? Even the best of stories or classics have something on others... Perhaps put omakes at the end of some chapters?
-Perhaps develop the romance a little more. I felt Hidan was a little too easy to convince given his previous devotion. He just outright tells Sakura why he follows Jashin without asking anything in return. He may be a little 'scared' of Sakura, even with the accentuated hormones from the drugs, but he was portrayed as more devoted earlier in the story.
Overall, I enjoyed this. Your plot was well developed and if a little strange or cliche at times, it made up for it with the originality of he arc. One last suggestion though, for future stories you may want to make some kind of complication in the end. Problems are conflicts which is the essence of drama, which you can then use to further your story. I just felt Hidan got his body back a little too easily, and it made the story seem to come to an abrupt halt, even with a sequel.

Still, I enjoyed it a lot, it was nicely written with good style and mix of exposition, dialogue, and narrative. It was engaging, and I believe your future or other stories will have similar success if you keep up this style. That's all for now, thanks for a great story.
Amestreu Solaris
2009-09-04 . chapter 18
I like the whole idea of Hidans Head being dug up again and him being reintroduced as a slightly different charachter.I would like a pinch more romance and a little longer but the story itself flowed well and was just plain awsome even though I was originally looking for a full on romance story, but you are a great writer I will stick with you if you need an editor e-mail me @ .

AmestreuSolaris
Ps.Love ~<3
ChinaDollMaiden
2009-08-26 . chapter 8
This story is very good so far! I love the interaction between Hidan and Sakura!
red-volpe
2009-06-28 . chapter 19
is that from "the tell-tale heart"?
red-volpe
2009-06-28 . chapter 14
`I’ll bet you anything that those old geezers just wish they were your enemy. Stupid Perverts.' lolzorz on that one.
red-volpe
2009-06-28 . chapter 9
The little bit of drama doesn't take away from the story at all! as a matter of fact, it adds to it! by putting in bits of seriousness, the comedy is more evident. Hidan seems more in character to me, and since he didn't really get more in depth than "I LOVE JASHIN & CAUSING PAIN" (which is a shame) I don't really think you can get him too ooc. ;D
xxpj14xx
2009-06-20 . chapter 19
yosh! i loveded the story!! can't wait to read the sequal! hey maybe u could check out my story and tell me wat you think!?
Tobi-chan
2009-05-28 . chapter 18
Ah...That was a great story! My favorite part was when Hidan was just a head. That was a funny idea!
Tobi-chan
2009-05-28 . chapter 13
I hate Kakashi. He's a pervert. I hope Sakura doesn't plan on 'seducing' poor headless Hidan. It'd ruin the chaste-ness. Anyway, awesome story!!
DarkLillyOfTheNight96
2009-04-23 . chapter 19
This was a good story!
A Hidden Saint and Sinner
2009-02-08 . chapter 15
i l;ike it so far...continue tomorrow
Okuyukashii
2009-01-14 . chapter 19
This is a great story, the best HidaSaku I've ever read. Good job!
mieuwings
2008-11-02 . chapter 1
Well, that was interesting. Nice job though, especially if that was your first fic. Mainly everyone was kept in character and a lot of the scenes made me laugh, like when Sakura gets drugged by the candy...funny stuff. Anyways, I look forward to the sequel (which is already up, since I'm a little late finding this fic...).

Keep up the good work,
mieuwings~
Corrupted Anthro
2008-10-10 . chapter 9
lurved it! think it's awesome.. gotta go and read the next chapters now!
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