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| ArmoredSoul 2008-07-22 ch 6,  | abuseEep! O.o RUN AWAY! *flees* |
| FiannaChaosGal 2008-05-12 ch 6, | abuseI gotta say, that was a good plot twist, I so didn't see that coming. Keep it up dude. |
| FiannaChaosGal 2008-05-08 ch 5, | abuseI really do like your story. It was suspenful in the beginning and I like that, and the first fight sence between Spiderman and Venom was perfect, it really drew me in. The last chapter seemed to lack that supence and seemed a bit more dull then the previous chapters, and the fight sences after the first one didn't seem as good to me. It seemed to me like they were too much about the characters and the drama rather then what was going on. And you seem to dramatize all the gore and blood instead of horrorize it. You make the charatcers almost believable. Like, they're on the verge of being there, and seeming real, but somethings lacking that doesn't make them all there. I think that with a bit more practice you could change this. It almost feels like the story's losing steam as it goes on. It seems just to dragging on as I go back and reread it. Strong beginning and weak middle type deal. And I really hope you write a strong ending to the story. And with that beginning I really think you could. Personally, I don't think I could tell you where I want you to go with this story. I don't really like doing that, but I do wanna find out what Venom meant in the first chapter. But maybe you could throw a major plot twist in there? Something that would be like a I-so-didn't-see-this-coming type deal. Anyway, I hope you finish the next chater soon, and I hope I helped a lil. |
| Gorgara 2008-01-29 ch 1, | abuseNice I look forward to more. Just one thing though since your killed Venom it doesn't matter anyway, but he always uses us and we instead of I otherwise really cool. |
| sealkid3 2008-01-27 ch 1, | abuseDude i like it and and i really would like to find out what Venom's cryptic message means. So good luck on your next chapters cuz you got a good storyline going on and looks like this story is gonna be a good one. |
| Spider-fan 2008-01-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseWell, I would say it's a nice prologue, are you going to make the story an alternative one, or in the spiderman continuity ? |