It's a great story,but Eva is kind of Mary sue-ish and meangirl mixed together, I mean, there's too much random "pulling out hearts" violence! You have great passion for descriptions and stuff like that, but if a person gets killed, put more detail in it and don't write the death scene suddenly! Don't mean to be mean or anything, it's just that I'm trying to give you some advice, but hey that's my opinion, you don't have to agree with me.

OH! It's good.