I liked it a lot. The grammar could be better (run on sentences) but the mood was great. It really works as a oneshot. :)

wow that was really good please continue

Woah,that was absolutely amazing. I LOVED IT IT WAS AWESOME!

so beautiful *_*

Aww...such a cute ending! Now I feel all depressed

i love you're story! ^-^

Short and sweet good job!
Here's a few tiny tips for your next one:
It kind of junps from setting to setting making the beginning a tad confusing.
Um..Oh.. Wait... no nothing else it was too good!

Woow, I really feel like I'm reading a best-seller book. Congratulations, good job

Wow...that is very interesting. I like your writing style, too.

oneshort? No, please! I want the next chapter...PLEASE

^^ that's my penname, I'm just too lazy to sign in...

Wow, that's really good. I know it's a oneshot, but I hope you consider adding on more chapters...

aw.

x[

that's so sad!

Really really well written though.

O, my GOd! it's so good and tragedic! i want the next chapter!