I loved the storyline. The only thing I could see a problem with is Adam being up so soon after his fall. My own husband had a back injury (to this day he doesn't have feeling in the upper portion of one leg)...there's no way Adam would be up that soon. Keep up the good work.

Well this story is begging for a sequel. Is one coming?

Great concept for a story. It is a terrific story line. I would encourage you to take a close look at your punctuation. Also, it might be nice to have more narrative. That's something I have to work on all the time. It's so easy to hear the voices of the characters. I keep forgetting that someone else may not hear the motivations behind what they're saying.

The other thing I would look at is the medical end of it all. While Adam might want to go to the party so soon, he wouldn't be allowed out of bed - even back then. There is a lot of pain associated with spinal cord injury despite what people think.

Anyhow, again, I loved the sequel to Adam's story. It ws a fun read!