Ok, Ok, LOL first you shouldn't try to post a story just because you wanted one! anyways... why did you want it on a gamecube? ok on this part you missed the word say "he needed to do what ever Alkaid all day since apparently it was her birthday" well it didn't really suck and it could've been cuter.. anyways i'm making a Haseo X Saku or Bo fic read it if you want to kill some time ;D
Oh, there you go, beating yourself up again. Please don't, I thought it was pretty good (Even if the only .hack I ever experienced was .hack//SIGN). So now I assume you'll be going back to PS? It was kind of quick, though.