I love Face Down, the song, and the story. Now on to the sequel.
-Kate

i wonder what happened to kim to be so down although you told us that it was because of the shego incident... but dating jack's the start of kim's doom... i'm so glad shego rescued our hero... i wanna kick jack's ass for making kim so useless in my own sense... thanks for the story... and you mentioned that shego age every four years so that means that kim will be much older than her after four years wherein shego's only 21 while kim's already 24 or 25.., correct? oh, i think that will be problem if i were in they're situation but i know they'll be okay... thanks again...

Interesting end here. Though, it does skim a bit on details. But it was quite nice. And not really a whole lot to comment on here. Although, when Shego was giving Kim a tour of the house, it probably would have been good to have it described a little more. Such as Kim's thoughts as Shego explains everything to her as she shows Kim around. Anyway, thanks for posting all of this. Now on to the sequel! ^_^

The part with Jack walking past the guards for Kim's room again was quite amusing. You'd think that the guards would have received specific orders not to let him through, but it just seems like his charm just wins him through. Although, I kinda wonder how he'd last if he tried to get past Will Du. Especially if he tried getting physical. ^_^ Anyway, the only real input I can give for this chapter is that you should have had Kim respond in some way to her mother's speech. Even if it's a simple 'thanks' or a look of gratitude. A reaction certainly would have been helpful. Anyway, on to the next chapter! ^_^

That was pretty good. Although, one bit I feel that I should mention again is that you didn't consider the bit with Kim having broken ribs at the start. And when it came time for Shego to stop the family hug, I'd say that she wouldn't be up to a forceful hug like would have happened if they'd rushed in and given her the hug. But, if they gave her a hug causally or tenderly, then that'd be different. Though, the part with Vivian and Betty felt like it was just thrown in at the end. As I kinda wondered if they'd talk with Kim when they sat towards the back. And I don't mean 'talk' like what they did. But rather that they'd also have something to say to Kim about what happened and such. Although, I think one thing that would also be nice would be to hear Kim's reason for why she allowed Jack to do all that to her rather than speaking out about it earlier on. Anyway, on to the next chapter! ^_^

That was an amusing end. This chapter really is a lot better than the previous ones. But, there's still several areas that could have been done better. Such as Ann instantly believing Shego about Jack having caused the damage to Kim. I'd have expected her to have just 'played along' with that idea rather than being completely convinced about it. And I'd have expected Ann to use her 'little girl' instead of 'bubblebutt'. As in a crisis like that, nicknames and petnames are often discarded. Unless the person has always referred to the person like that. Then towards the end where Kim and Shego were cuddling on the hospital bed, Kim wouldn't have been able to move around so much without feeling the pain of her broken ribs. And Shego would have responded instantly to any signs of pain. Also, having Shego's powers instantly heal Kim's injuries seemed a bit over the top. I mean, it just seemed like you wanted to have things suddenly all perfect. Where if anything, I'd have seen Shego's powers just increasing the healing rate for Kim rather than healing everything but the bones. But, anyway, on to the next chapter! ^_^

That was interesting. Although, it still was pretty fast paced. The bit I think could have been fleshed out a little more is when Kim gets home. As in adding a few thoughts of Jack's as well as Shego getting into position to rush in and save Kim. Overall, it was pretty good, but still feels like there's more that could be done with it. Anyway, on to the next chapter! ^_^

That was pretty good, but I feel like there should have been a few more thoughts or at least description around when Shego let Kim run off so she could talk to Ron about it. I kinda wondered if it'd be handled well, Shego finding out, but it really was nicely done. And it didn't feel like it was glossed over or anything. But, a few more thoughts all round and a bit more dialogue (sp?) as well as some more detail would also help quite a bit. ^_^ Anyway, on to the next chapter!

The main problem that I have with this chapter is that Jack has done a 180 in his attitude around others. I personally would have expected him to have acted like it was recent and that he just couldn't "control" himself at times. Which is what then happens. And then he'd come up with a story that would get Ron to try and comfort him. Then when he left or getting Kim a little help, leaving out what Jack "didn't mean to do", Kim gets more of that treatment. That's just a big hole I see there, because someone as charismatic as Jack would understand that holding two different attitudes would bleed into each other, even without meaning to and he'd eventually slip up in front of someone who he didn't want to know what he does.

And I also think that it'd be helpful to have added some thoughts for Ron while he was on his way over. Kinda like coming up with a speech in his mind of what to say to Jack or how to bring it up.

Also, having at least a flashback of the first time it happened would also be quite good to see. Anyway, on to the next chapter!

It seems a little better here, even though the pace is still pretty brisk. There isn't a point where more details would help, other than where the abuse is, which would just increase the angst and drama in this. Although, a few more thoughts of Kim's during the abuse would help a bit as well. But, anyway, on to the next chapter! ^_^

The pace seems a bit off with this. If you added a little more detail to this, then it'd really flush out the weak areas. And it'd feel more complete. That and it wouldn't feel so rushed. I can understand not wanting to go into detail about the abuse, but that's where I find it most weak. Though, a bit more details about Kim's mission would also help. Especially if you added more thoughts and inner arguments as well. Then it'd really feel well rounded. Anyway, on to the next chapter! ^_^

It's off to a pretty good start. Though, I wouldn't mind a little more detail about why Kim's so upset about that tower incident. Maybe more will come in the next chapters, but it just seems a little off to me right now. But, otherwise it's pretty good. And hopefully there'll be a little more back story to it all. ^_^ Anyway, on to the next chapter!

wow i will so be reading the sequel but i gotta say this stoey was simply amazing

sweet...

its over T_T wa thats so sad.
anyway i liked the ending maybe you can make a sequl without anther song.
great job with this story
^^