Reviews for Wherever the Heart May Sway

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LazyChestnut 2008-03-25 ch 17,	abuseI knew I hated Latham for a reason. And Longshanks is in on this! THAT'S a surprise! He did seem a teeny bit like a typical villain here, but I've been in the car for 3 hours with two stinking males, so I'm a bit cranky. Good job, overall!
LazyChestnut 2008-03-13 ch 16,	abuseHmm; I'm not liking Latham at ALL now. And I may just be paranoid, but that Spencer bloke seems a bit suspicious. I recognized the LotR quote ;) You still write quite well, but quite a few modern-sounding phrases pop up every now and then, and there are still some grammar issues. Perhaps you should consider a beta; I find that other people are able to catch my mistakes a lot better than me ;)
LazyChestnut 2008-03-09 ch 15,	abuseUgh; men. Men and their pride. As you may be able to tell, I'm a femmy, and I hate when men act all macho and bleh. But good job ;) I can't help but laugh whenever Thomas starts using language; I know it's horrible, considering my 14 cousins and ALL the kids I babysit, but it's hilarious to see this little kid swearing like a common sailor! I also felt really bad for him when Roger came in. Poor Thomas; his own father treating him like that! I want to hug him. And for some reason, I liked Meghan's interaction with Bathilda. Maybe because there was a dearth of women. shrugs Either way, it was a good scene. My only nitpicks is that I don't think kids would have said "bazillion" back then, since mathematicians rarely strayed even to the millions, but it was nothing big. Excellent work, and I look forward to more!
LazyChestnut 2008-03-05 ch 14,	abuseI seem to have received this chapter twice. Hmm... I thought Sean was the black-haired boy who said "William Wallace is seven feet tall," but I guess I was mistaken. Sorry! I liked this Spencer Griffin character; very nice. My only nitpick is that sometimes you add commas where you don't need to (don't worry, I love commas too), and sometimes you leave them out. But it's nothing glaringly obvious. Great chapter! So...will we be seeing Stephen soon? ;)
The Barracking Bard 2008-03-04 ch 13,	abuselol Sean's my own character. Completely made up.
LazyChestnut 2008-03-04 ch 13,	abuseBut...but Sean lives...we see him in the last scene of the movie... I'm confused. And sad.
LazyChestnut 2008-03-01 ch 12,	abuseHoly crap, woman! Just scare us, why don'tcha?! Excellent chapter. My only nitpick, and it's not really a nitpick, is that you say an aged veteran; unless I'm really mistaken, that was Sean who went out there and held up his kilt. But whatever; it's your story! Great job, and I can't wait for more! Wow, how many times can I say that at the end of a review?
LazyChestnut 2008-02-26 ch 11,	abuseYay, another chapter! And an interesting one! Although no Stephen :( So, Latham is sucking up to Longshanks. Nice. And Meghan playing the doting wife; meh. One thing, though, and it may just be idiocy on my part: I'm in Latin, and I believe the phrase you used either means "Serve peace" or "Free peace." Could you please clarify on that for me? If it was an oft-used phrase at the time, forgive me, because I've never heard of it. All in all, well done!
LazyChestnut 2008-02-24 ch 10,	abuseAh, finally; Stephen's first encounter with the Highlanders! I always kind of thought Faudron was Scottish; the Irish didn't come in until later on in the movie, but we haven't covered this in AP World, so maybe I'm mistaken ;) Great chapter; I especially loved the interaction Stephen had with God. Update soon!
LazyChestnut 2008-02-21 ch 9,	abuseOh. Snap. What a chapter! Stephen is introduced to Doubters Jr. and Sr. (I always love that part of the movie), Thomas's ears are more tainted than we would like, Meghan is returned to Methuselah, AND, to top it all off, she KILLs him! WOOHOO! There were a few awkward sentences, but nothing bad. So...I'll be anxiously awaiting the resolution to this cliffhanger!
LazyChestnut 2008-02-18 ch 8,	abuseAw; a whole chapter for me? How kind! I'm flattered! Well, I'm really starting to hate Latham now. Grr. And poor Meghan! Four days! That's not fair. You're killing me! sobs At least she knows what all is going on now. She knows that Stephen is alive and such. Great chapter!
Isabelle LH 2008-02-18 ch 7,	abuseGosh this is beautiful! But also very heartbreaking :( I will admit - I was very nearly moved to tears because you write so well! I can't believe they had just missed eachother! You capture the character's emotions very well. I will indeed continue reading because it seems your ending each chapter with a cliff hanger ... Sneaky ;) ~ JWritten
LazyChestnut 2008-02-17 ch 7,	abuseARGH! They just missed each other! You cruel person! Well, I suppose I can forgive you if you post another splendiferous chapter soon. ;) Short, but good. I felt Meghan's longing to be back, and I almost groaned out loud when she called Stephen's name, because he left!
LazyChestnut 2008-02-17 ch 6,	abuseI tried reviewing earlier, and it wouldn't let me. Did you repost? Moving on. I really liked this chapter. I especially liked Meghan's conversation with God. I think a lot of us feel like that sometimes. I was really surprised to see her hit Latham; poor fellow! But it had to be done. I know I'm not very articulate, but this was a really, really good chapter! And I will start recommending this to people; one of the few good Braveheart fics, and it's underappreciated!
LazyChestnut 2008-02-14 ch 5,	abusehuffs Fine, leave me hanging, why don't you! I suppose I'll just have to wait. sigh One teeny nitpick: You said "bared a child" when it should be "bore a child." Unless you meant for him to use improper English. shrugs Just something I noticed. Otherwise, very good, and I anxiously await the next installment!

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