KICK HIS BUTT, CYPRESS!

Coming together nicely! So many twists and turns, and you manage to keep it all nicely paced. You have me curious who the character death is going to be. My interest is peaked.

Two very lucky young creatures there. Eldra saved them, and it seems like Cypress learned a valuable lesson. Acadius is ready to cause more trouble, and I have a feeling of impending doom here. Can't wait to have some of the tension resolved, see what happens next. Excellent job!

Quite interesting to see how the plot thickens this time around. I'm sure there are a ton of small clues here and there to important later events. So I'm sure it'll prove interesting to see what happens. As before very well done on the writing. Very descriptive. We did jump around quite a bit from character to character, but it didn't seem like it made the plot not make sense. Again well done.

Ahh, the battle has started. Acadius is truly evil, you do an excellent job of making that come through. Can't wait to read what you have in store for us next.

(whistles)

Awesome job; you've done pretty well. Like the character of Acadius, keep this up.

This is superbly fantastic. Keep it going, keep it up; I'd hate to see this be abandoned.

Exellent battle chapter. I also liked that we got into the action straight away. No build up of gloom and doom or anything like that. Just straight into the fight. Wonderfully descriptive too. It was very easy to see how the fight was going in the minds eye. That takes patience and dedication to ones writing in order to pull it off and you did it fantastically. I'm looking forward to more.

Answer me truthfully, dl-shipper34. Are you Brian Jacques? You rock.

Nice continuation, very well presented. Again, it's like being able to "see" what's going on. Very good job, well done.

yay awsome new chapter i am really likeing this story i cannot wait for you to update happy writeing!!

-creed

Reading through the rest of the chapters made me think I was reading another Redwall book. That's a good thing in that you've captured how BJ writes his books very well. Lot's of great description, a bit of mystery is set up here and there, Martin is doing what he always does, so in that respect well done.

However as I said before it can be a bit of determent to you to write something so close to Redwall canon. While I did enjoy the story and my favorite kinds of fics are ones that stay true to canon what makes fanfiction interesting is seeing how an author can add their own twists. The only one I've seen so far is that we have a fisher as a warlord. I don't think that's been in any Redwall book as of yet so in that regard well done. I know you're trying to keep true to Redwall canon and I applaud you for that. but a few twists to make it your own story rather than a direct copy of Bj's style would be fun too.

All in all it was very good. Exellent story telling skills. It'll be interesting to see how this progresses.

Once again, an interesting chapter, very strong imagery. Look forward to a continuation. Nice job!

(foams at the mouth) YOUR STORY IS AWESOME!

three awsome things 1 fighting 2 a-w-w-w-w-w--w-w cute baby squirrl
3 the hare eats food! lol any ways happy writing and update soon ( adds to favs)


-Creed

Wow. WOW. If I didn't know better, I'd think BJ himself wrote this. I can't wait to see how this story turns out!