i loved your story. it had a certain...je ne sais quoi. katie is a cool character, and you portrayed asher wonderfully. i really liked the ending. It didn't end with the graphic seduction, but the more subtle cliff hangar that leaves much to the imagination. i would love to see a sequel!

This was an excellent story! This is more of obnoxious gushing from me than any kind of useful review, but I had to tell you how much I enjoyed reading it. Asher is a lovely character, and it's nice to see him get some hapiness.

OH MY GOD! You just have to write more! I love all of Laurell K. Hamilton books! Anita Blake books r da best!

PLEASE please please please please write more! Please?

Ahhhhhhh! That can't be ALL of it! Write more. I LOVE ASHER. He deserves to get someone. Write more,PLEASE

please write more! Its really good! I pity the workload, but please write! please ,please !

I loved it. Just what a Asher story needs to be. I would love it if you continued the story. Let me know.

You can't really leave it like this. Even if it takes a while you have to finish this someday...)

OH COME ON! THAT CAN'T BE ALL THERE IS! MORE! MORE! MORE! PLEASE!

Oh! I love it! I love Asher! I wish I had an Asher plushie! He really deserves someone, please! write more! Please!

So write some more!

I love Asher and I love this fic!

that story was great! pleassseee write more!

Your writing is very eloquent, the style,diction, and conversations are intriguing but I have some disputes towards your characters and particular characteristics for them. Katie seems far too much like Anita Blake, her ability to catch Asher's eye is quite possible but your description of Asher seems to really piss me off. If you've read Blue Moon, you know that Asher is not some whiny pathetic little woe is thee guy. He is slightly ashamed of his disfigurement, but I think you've made him tooo sensitive, and not nearly as strong or intelligent enough. And you've made Asher a clone of Jean Claude. Ask yourself, what makes these two characters different, and am I making a clear distinction between the two of them. By having Asher call Katie ma feu, it is too close to Jean Claude's endearment of Anita as ma petite. you're a fairly impressive writer, I'd just make small changes.

Please, write more on this if you can. Asher is my favorite character of the books and I practically cheered to see him getting some happiness. This has the potential to be a very interesting story, so please consider it!

C'est moi, your beta! Remember me? Don't have time to read the new stuff right now, but nice to see some new chapters! (And please tell me I didn't waste my time critiqueing the first 6 or 7 chapters.) I'll read the rest later.