I have no idea how to comment it. Seriously. And I mean it so great, your style and whole idea. You need to write more. For me XD

I like this part best of all. It nicely ties up everything. So fitting that Lucy glimpsed Aslan. And the end with her siblings, the lion roaring, trees rustling, "Someday," was perfect.

Great job done and thank you for this wonderful read. :D

The Hansel and Gretel reference in this chapter worked very well. (I'd never before realized how similar their and Edmund's stories are.) I really enjoyed you having Edmund getting along well with Lucy before the war. The interaction between them made me smile.

I think you wrote Susan very well. She had spirit. Your descriptions in this chapter were lovely. And it was so fitting that Charlie made a donkey. Nice foreshadowing. :)

A very interesting idea! I liked how you wrote all the Pevensies. For some reason I liked it that Peter could not recall exactly what he had experienced, for a moment being a king.

It'S beautiful...
I think I like Susan the best, and Lucy of course...
Luna

love it to death. i loved Lucy's especially. i love this. keep it up ok? i'm not much of a writer but i know a good one when i see one.

I absolutely loved this story! You portray all the characters so well, and the chapters fit together so well.

I love the fourshot. it was great that you incorapted some bits and pices of what happened to them when they younger it expains a lot about their personaitys espcieally Edmund and Lucy with their first experinces with the white witch and Aslan.

Hi! I read your story from a website called "The Lion's Call", and I thought it was really good. You should write more stories!

i would love it if you continued, (if you still want to), maybe having them remember their first encounters ...

Nice! Great story!

Very nice. Poor Edmund. He's the only one to get a bad memory. Everyone else got a good memory. Even Susan's wasn't that bad.

Aw. This was so sweet.

This is cute. I'm not sure you need to expand it any, it works pretty well just the way it is.