Well I must say... that this looks great!

The beginning of the story and set time line show a lot of hope for nice long story and I like how the characters ack so far.

If you planing to try to continue this one it would be great to see how will things go from this small introduction. You could try to add little bit darker tone to the current situation.

The general first look on the chapter look good with loots of room to add more twists and sub plots so I really hope you will try to continue this one in "full force".
so good luck and best wishes from ZeoUnit

Interesting story.

I assume the girl in this case was Hilde, worked nicely. Felt vaguely reminiscent of Zechs and Noin.

Good luck best wishes,

Hououza

I like it. Update soon.