i cried then i read it

That was so SAD! *crys* i'm not one for tragedy storys but this was so good! nejten FOREVER!

This little thing you got here...
really made me cry, yeah.
I wrote something where tenten died to, but this...
It was wonderful...the meloncholy was a perfect blend of love and hurt...

I LOVE IT, YEAH.

I think you did great.
It made me want to cry; tears did come out, but I could exactly cry...There were a bunch of people in the room.
So all I could do was to sniffle in my sleeve. Really now, it's starting to have little tear stains from all the tragedy/cheesy fanfics that I read...
...
Anyway, I think you wrote this really well! But it was sad )':

great piece
underrated
not at all oc, as neji is a man of little words, so it's his thoughts that count.
brought tears to my eyes
awesome piece
5 star*


(the alternations between third person (he/his) and first (i) was a wee bit confusing
some spelling mistakes)

Hana: this is a great story BUT ITS SO SAD!
Mori: *cries*
Han: SEE?!! MORI-CHAN CRYING THAT MEANS THAT YOU'RE A GREAT ENOUGH AUTHOR TO MAKE SOMEONE CRY!! great story but personally i prefer happy endings...
Amikage: this needs more violence, but yeah it was a great story keep up the good work...

I read it as well thought out, and certainly well written, but I couldn't help notice your switching from first person to third person in the middle paragraphs and sentences. Confusing, yet the only thing I suggest ou work on.

its so sad
it made me cry

I think I've read your Last Chance story...-sniffles- Oh man this story is so beautiful! Well done...simply beautiful yes very very beautiful...poor Neji...poor Tenten...marvelous... simply wonderful, keep up the good work!

o nejixtenten! ^^ nice oneshot, but no offense, ive seen better stories... this one was a bit too... wordy without conversation, but it was good for a short story ^^

it's very good. there are some parts that are written start off going "I" then in the same sentence say "he/him" you might want to double check that. o and theres another part that should have said why instead of shy..."I had never questioned shy she was always willing to train with me"

OMFG, THAT was tragic...Yet satisfying...Ppl don't know what they have 'till they lose it...

oh my gawd... SUU SAD! but... who stabbed her? That was nagging at me for a while... whoever did... BY THE POWER OF SUGAR, WE'LL KEEL THIS PERSON! Tenten can't be dead! she's too...cool! ya kno?! WHO ELSE CAN WE GET SUGAR HIGH WITH?! it won't be the same without Tenten! and, by the looks of it... Neji is gonna commit suicide OR go cutter. I thought it turned out pretty well. I have a zillion song ficz in meh head, but I dunno how to make one... I mean, I know how, I just can't space everything properly. And this is one of my fav. songz by Hinder. I suggest you make another song fic to the song 'Life Is Beautiful' by Sixx AM. It's a really good song. I think I can pull up the link for you later on, alright?

~Rikku Madara Uchiha~
Ex's cut into my skin like a razor blade.
The oh's hold my neck nice and tight.
~Me, based on the song 'Ex's and Oh's' by Atreyu

wow, powerful
it was a good fic
i luv the song too, really good
neji wasn't too oc-ish, he was greiving
good job once again

LOVED IT NEVER NEJI HAD A SWEET SIDE LOL!GREAT FIC YOU SHOULD REALLY DO ANOTHER!;P