 J. Corkill 2009-11-09 . chapter 1I really LOVE historical romances so immediately I am pulled in. The writing is lighthearted and you have a good base to start with.
However, I think your work could use some polishing. You have quite a few run on sentences and repeated words:
"She froze as she took a biscuit and looked up at her father, who had a certain look on his face again. She sighed, in frustration towards her father, and dropped the biscuit onto her plate, which made a continuos clinking noise against the porcelain until it stopped rolling around. She kept staring back at him and made an inquisitive face."
Minor errors like that. You have a great story and I can help you polish it up if you want. |
 TheGirlInTheMirror0415 2009-10-19 . chapter 32I'm so happy you updated :) It definitely made my Monday a whoel lot better.
Go Sarah! I'm so glad that she expressed exactly how she was feeling. That pompous man, who is he to decide what is best for her?
HA Poor Jean. He must be ready to run away and never return.
Wonderful job. I can't wait until the next update :) |
 TheGirlInTheMirror0415 2009-10-14 . chapter 31I'm truly in love with this story. I absolutely love Eve and Jean together. They make such a cute couple. I was so dissapointed when I realized I had read up to the most recent post. I really hope you update soon! |
 patriotgirl101 2009-09-25 . chapter 31YAY! Really liked this chapter! Please update soon! |
 patriotgirl101 2009-09-11 . chapter 30No! Not a cliffy! Please update soon. |
 patriotgirl101 2009-09-03 . chapter 29This chapter was great! I hope Jean can convince eve's father! |
 patriotgirl101 2009-08-28 . chapter 28I love this story! There aren't enough Jean fics out there! Please update soon. |
 Mrs. Eric Northman 2012 2009-08-12 . chapter 26YES! SUCCESS! love this chappie u r awesome
xoxo
Mrs. Eric Northman
pss. formerly Slytherin Princess 2012
:-D |
 ABM 2009-08-07 . chapter 20Sorry I haven't reviewed in such a long time. I totally agree with Slytherin Princess, lots of Eve/Jean moments would make my day. I'm going to go look at your illustrations now. Please update soon! |
 Mrs. Eric Northman 2012 2009-08-07 . chapter 20AWESOMEST CHAPPIE EVA!I ORDER U TO UPDATE NOW!:-p MORE E/J MOMENTS PLZ!I JUST SAW UR PICS...AMAZING!LORVE THEM!PLEASE UPDATE SOON
TODAY IF U MUST I DONT THINK I CAN GO ANOTHER 24 HOURS WITHOUT READING THIS! |
 Mrs. Eric Northman 2012 2009-08-05 . chapter 17OMB so GREAT! UPDATE RIGHT AWAY I WANT TO C MORE EVE AND JEAN MOMENTS! U R AHMAHZING!PLEASE UPDATE ASAP!
XOXO
SLYTHERIN PRINCESS 2012 |
 Mrs. Eric Northman 2012 2009-08-04 . chapter 16No no no no no no! Jean has 2 go after HUr! Please I am begging u for the love of all that is good please update and SOON!
Can u tell I lurv the story!?!?!?!?
Xoxo
Slytherin Princess 2012 |
 ABM 2009-05-24 . chapter 12I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
Abbie |
 ABM 2009-04-06 . chapter 6This is the second time I've read your story and I feel bad I didn't review the first time. I just watched The Patriot again yesterday and it reminded me of this story. I re-red it again today and I really want to know what happens next. I hope you update again soon.
Abbie. |
 Shmer Bear 2009-01-10 . chapter 6i love this story! please keep updating!
Gormlaith Nadezhda |