 Lasgalendil 2009-04-03 . chapter 1This was certainly an interesting piece! I loved hearing his nervousness about her upcoming potential marriage-not for her safety and security, but her interest! 'Now if only he could convince her of these facts.' Very humorous!
I would only suggest one thing: make this last line a separate paragraph. I think you'll find this heightens the irony of this last sentence. |