Good story. I'm going for the sequel right now.

Very cool ending...bravo...I'll definately read the sequel

really good but at the end Jake should of said aww mann.

Nice double chapters (this is also reviewing chap 3)

Another good story chapter...

Bravo. Looking forward to the next part

Ignore Name4ever...

He's a bit of an idiot at the moment.

I personally think that you're making a great story...Keep it up

(PS...name4ever also has a second account called 4evernamed...watch out. *gives you fire extinguisher for use against flamers)

I'm looking forward to the rest of the story

dis is a terrible fan fic!

for realz

lolz it was so dumb.

u should read die immortal, a bautiful fan fic!