It was a great read. Your pacing, and story make for an excellent page turner. Your prose did get a bit heavy at times. You can use them very well to set a scene, but other times it feels a little bit smothering. I loved some of the tiny details you had, things like the sacrifice of beards.

Anyway good read, definitely recommend it others.

A delightful, yet chilling story . As I started reading this I could feel chills go down my spine from the vivid and graphic details you've depicted. And once you start, you can't stop until the very end. I admit there were some parts I had a hard time following (like when they crashed into the pit trap), but overall it was a good read.

And the horror ride ends.

*sighs*

Excellently done. The way you've tempered the revelations so as to achieve a middle ground between apathy and hysteria is superb. The distance thrust upon the reader throughout all three chapters greatly helped to establish the story's atmosphere. Truly a wondrous read.

I find myself lacking sufficiently expressive words to laud this chapter with. And it is laudable in terms of detail and action. The briefness only serves to highlight the intensity. We can't always have a hour-long Iron Man Match gruelfest.

Vena cava superior. Aorta. Arteria pulmonalis. Bronchus principalis. Yes, the details.

I have put this on the back burner for long enough- and I again ask myself the question: "Why the hell did I delay?"

A masterful entry! You skillfully veer from sweeping generalization to gory detail and back again, leaving just the right amount of information for the imagination to work upon. While Giuseppe and Henrietta seem to take a backseat to the weighty plot and dark scenarios, there is no doubt towards the end that they will not stand around idly to be mocked and ignored- nay, vengeance is the Lord's, and they are his sword.

Well done!

Nachtsider, your stories continue to amaze me. If you can work this magic with fanfiction, then I think you have a future as a novelist.

Hey there, this is Ryan. I must say that this story creeped me out. Those two killers Nightfall and Sundown were monsters! It's like they came straight from Hell or something!

Those two make the Republican Factionists and the Mafia look like cute kittens by comparison...

It makes me glad that Henrietta killed that pair of monsters and avenged the deaths of her family along with all of their other victims.

The lesson learned in this story is that if you're a psychotic murderer and you try and kill someone, make sure that they're dead or else they just might come back to kill you and send you
to where it's always Halloween!!

Justice served.

...

Nah. They should've suffered.

An interesting take on Henrietta's rape story.

I could never forget this distinct style of writing. Magnificent.

The action was slow, but very understandable and very breathtaking. I could easily imagine everything going on.

Henrietta's final move though, was rather ... eehwwuu... I'd like to see what's next.

I must've missed this story.

The errie descriptions set the scene and helped increase suspense. You kept the theme throughout to the horrid end. Your writing style is nearly poetic, as usual, giving the story a senes of feeling, only I have seen in Edgar Allen Poe.

Shock and awe. Light problem with missing quotation marks in one place, but other than that... oh hell mate. Shock and awe.