Sweet Jesus, this was amazing. You write exactly how I imagine Asriel would think. This was one of my favorite scenes in the series, and you've written it from his perspective perfectly.

*To comment readers, spoiler in this comment, please don't read if you haven't read The Amber Spyglass*

Really good, I love this. Especially the part about Lyra twisting the story until Marisa gets locked in a glass tower and Asriel has to rescue her. Brilliant. Although, (and I don't mean to pick holes) you say at the end of Chapter 4 that Asriel will never return to his world, but he does in The Amber Spyglass because he rescues Marisa at Saint-Jean-les-Eaux, which is in their world.

Nice. Liked it.

I love your Asriel fics, they are amazing. What a great introspective piece about the Byronic hero--and his total dismissal of his own family for ambition. He is just as bad as Marisa Coulter, if you really think about it.

Of course, the end was sexy. I do love the makey-outy scene at the end of the book--actually, its probably my favorite scene in all of the books.

Everything I hoped it'd be. As I said before, you've done Lord Asriel very well, and done a good job of fitting your story in with what is set down in the book. A pat on the back, congratulations.

I guess that's all there is to say on this story. Keep writing, please.

-StarMan.

Man, you sure have Asriel down to a T! :D

I loved this, you know I love anything you write. Its so passionate, so reach in character detail; the stuff I want to read.

I found that amusing, that Pullman said that Asriel kept pics of Lyra with him ... makes me go AW. XD

Great job with this story.

*Update Torn Masks son!*

That was amazing, seriously.

I've read all of your HDM stories/oneshots, but I can honestly say that this is my favourite.

Loved it.

Update Torn Masks soon?

That was awesome, so sad but beautiful...I think i've said that before XD

This for the last two chapters.

All I have to say is Wow! Like I said before, I love how Asriel thinks. He's so utterly ruthless, yet still almost human. You've gotten that perfectly.

When you read the books, it seems like Lyra is his equal. I guess that's because SHE thinks herself his equal. But, reading your stories, it's clear that she is not. She is still a child, no matter how special, and Asriel is as far from a child as is possible. It's really cool to get it from such a different perspective.

Update Torn Masks soon please!
Great story!
--kyra

Oh, I loved that!

Poor Roger...you captured Asriel's motives very well, too.

Looking forward to the next chapter :]

That was really good, no one has written about what happened when Rodger was taken my Asriel. I am so excited about the last chapter! SQE!

Very well written :]

I'm looking forward to seeing the last two chapters! Keep up the amazing work!

Another great chapter. I love how Asriel thinks. I'm not sure why, I just really enjoy getting inside his head. Great chapter!

More soon!
--kyra

Yay! Another chapter! I liked how Asriel was seeing Marisa in her. Can't wait for another chapter:P Oh and it's Magisterium not Magesterium.

Nice work. Well written - of course if it wasn't, I wouldn't review.

Lord Asriel has always been a very interesting character to me - above everything else, for the moral ambiguity behind his actions. I think you've captured his character very well.

I look forward to seeing Asriels point of view on the last two chapers as well.

-StarMan.

Ps.
I notice that other reviewers have said that the repetition of "still, he waits" must be a typo. It seems to me to be a perfect normal literary device - and well placed, too. Who is correct, here?