"Poof."
BOOM
Priceless, absolutely priceless. That was HILARIOUS! Awesome ending!

ROTFLMAO oh. my. god. This was just TOO damned funny! This is an awesome chapter!

Cute ending! Is there a side story that involves Piccolo and Gohan mpreg?

hey what ever happened to that sequal. not begging for it just wondering. i was hopeing to see Gohan and Goten get Pregger's with a baby. Goten and Trunks child should have pink hair.

lol. That was too good. He did it on purpose and he's only two weeks old. I don't remember seeing a sequel for this yet in your fics so I'll just have to keep an eye out for it.

lol. That was great! But i'm curious as to weather or not Gohan and Piccolo have tried again.

Poor Gohan. I feel so bad for him.

i like it

not too much the part of piccolo as he cant have kids in that way

Wow; I really like how you made saiyian birth out to be! It's...well, it makes sense to me. I really don't read many M-preg fics( mainly because the thought of a man...popping out his kid...kinda disturbs me) But this was WONDERFULLY done.

Oh!... I WANNA SEE GOHAN's BABY! ... Hee... I wonder if it will be green...with antenna and shaggy black hair. Aww, too cute! You had me worried when Vegeta cried like that... > > So much...tension! Eek!

Anyway, this was beautifully done, and I can't wait to read the sequel!

If you would have killed that cub, I would have flamed you!!

But you didn't... And that bitch got what's coming to her!..So...

I love you =D (I wonder how many declarations of love you get in a story...)

Bwahaha! Zomg, that was funny shit. Vegeta's mood swings make me laugh. And cry, at the same time, because I feel hella bad for Goku. ...

Poor Goku.

Bwahaha, I love the antics of Goten and Trunks.

...They remind me of me in my youth. But without...you know...monkey parents and purple hair.

well this story was great i love it

and about the sequel well take your time i know what you mean when you feel pressured so take your time ^-^

we will all be very happy when you do come out with it because well we do always save the best for last ^-^

Hi I just read Ch.3... My comments are: Well I like yaoi too even though sometimes it feels OOC, however, everything's pretty good in your story EXCEPT the bashing! I HATE it, I'm sorry. Videl wouldn't act like such a brat; ChiChi and Bulma would be more understanding, if hurt. I understand that people have to be a little out-of-character for yaoi, but not this much. The vitriol against these women is scary.

ChiChi, Bulma, and Videl can come off as bratty and princess-y, sometimes even selfish, but in DBZ you can tell they really care about their significant others and family, and are pretty much understanding. Too many yaoi writers take advantage of what is just strong personality and confidence, which is actually really nice to see in anime, where women often have weak/boring personalities. Remember, all of them gave up so much for their husbands. Basically...

...can't I just enjoy some yaoi without feeling like I'm reading the Misogynist Manifesto?!??

Does anyone out there agree with me??

It's especially too bad since in all other respects this is a fantastic story. Sadly, this phenomenon is nearly universal in yaoi stories.

Can't people come up with plot elements without turning loving women into evil bitches? You're plenty creative. Please try.

Other than this, great story, everyone else is very in character and it's really well written. Sorry if I seemed harsh, don't stop writing.

simply awesome! you can put me on that notice-list right now for i´m definitely dead curious about how things will go on... piccolos+gohans first kid, maybe trunks+gotens, too, not to mention that special bond between the twins, there´s still so much potential in this.you mentioned something about keigo having a special strenght, too and i just need to know what that means. also i totally need to know if chi-chi is dead or still out there, causing further trouble...and if takeo will put the terror twins to shame with his pranks ;-)