Reviews for True intentions

CO Raven 2008-02-14 ch 2,	abuseThe display of Grit was much more in character this time, and you did pick up on his tendency to anticipate problems and start fixing them before Olaf says to do so. But I'd also say that he's probably the best tactician of defense and the ideal CO both for covert ops as well as defense of overrun positions. Also, Jake is not going to become a hero without any kind of very experienced teacher. I suggest having Grit help him along since he has the most experience if you want to emphasize Sasha. If you want to go on the Rachel route, go with Sensei or Grit since Orange Star doesn't have anyone else with a massive amount of battle experience who's got time on their hands. Nell is too busy, and the others couldn't possibly teach Jakethe type of fighting he does.
CO Raven 2008-02-06 ch 1,	abuseI know Grit like the back of my hand. Just PM me if you have trouble writing him.
DarkKingFire777 2008-02-05 ch 1,	abuseUse correct punctuation marks. Commas when they are needed (Commander Nell[,] the Orange Star military supreme commander[,] was sitting in her office on the 12th floor of Orange star HQ.) That's all the advice I can give you, but the story is great! :D