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| hippogriff-tamer 2008-07-13 ch 1,  | abusethis was an amazing Corny/Amber... |
| HighSchoolMusicalAddict1 2008-03-28 ch 1, | abusecute |
| master of toast 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abusemore please. :D |
| IHeartLinkLarkin 2008-02-14 ch 1, | abuseaw! that was totally cute! |
| EvilEmmaEvans 2008-02-10 ch 1, | abuseI like it and I might even try writing a story for this couple... but who knows. Luv alwayz, EvilEmmaEvans |
| LazyChestnut 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuseYay, another AmberCorny! Continue it? Sure, why not? But before you do, let me offer some concrit: There were some extremely awkward sentences here, and you used one of my biggest pet peeves: You said "should of" instead of "should have." Sorry, but that really, really bugs me. I know it *sounds* like "of," but it's "have." You use the word cold or coldly a lot. Perhaps using some synonyms would decrease repitition. It seemed kind of pointless for Amber to go in and visit Corny; they hate each other (or so it would seem), and she was walking home anyway. Maybe you could add in that she was hoping for a ride home? It would give her a better reason to visit him. I think that's about it. If you choose to go back and edit, I'm sure that the fic would improve greatly. I like this fic; I've always imagined Corny would take Amber to the doctor after the pageant! Sorry for the long review! |
| writergirl2003 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuseGreat story! :D Very cute! |
| tadsgirl 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuseYou did great! Yes! Go on! |