WOW! Nice Job buddy! you still need help spelling but it was soo awesome... I did read the second part "My Destiny" but didn't reveiw because it TICKED ME OFF! the name LOL!

Your question: Should I write a sequal?

My answer: Most definately! This story ROCKS and I am sure the sequal will too.



--Mark--

I loved that story and I think you should do a seackl

OK would it shock you if I said I was a dude? (flexs biseps that are incredibly pathetic). If you read my stories please only read International Police (it's my only story that has a plotline that is even semi understandable). I would love it if you wrote a sequal, and because I need to point this out most of your spelling mistakes seem to be with words that start with C or S (in other words you switch them around often).
I'm glad I could be of service (takes bow).
sorry about your wrist (just tell your dr. I sent you, you'll get good pain meds, but for god's sake don't say "the good dr. sent me." because you don't want to know what will happen)

signed the good dr.

P.S. ladies I'm available

Yeah I loved this...I hope to see a sequal...Also I am horselover2009 I just forgot my pastword...

If you don't have a squeal i will scream very loudly! I need to know what happens! I will give you all the sweets in the world if yo have a squeal! Please Please Please! Write a squeal! Oh and I'm not mad at you for haveing Jayda and Calib breaka up!

This was a really good chapter! Update soon!

I really liked this...keep up the good work

Sell is spelt cell (when used as a jail cell), cerpant is spelt serpant. Other than a few spelling errors I have no complaints.

signed the good dr.

I can't wait for more! This chapter was really good! I have one question though, did James hear Jayda when she said the who "i am your daughter but will never join you!" speech? Update soon!

You repeated yourself at the part where you talked about Tom Sr.'s death. Yeah I've made a chapter or two that was no fun at all. I'm sure it happens to everyone (or maybe it only happens to the fine few). By the way what happended to the little sister? Will she make a comeback?

signed the good dr.

I thought the chapter was good...i think jayda and voldermort should have more of a fight then
"go to hell!"
"don't turn your back on your enemy"
but this chapter is not as bad as you might think but it is not your best work...Still enjoyinh your writing

Great Job! It went down hill for a while but came back great! When will the rest come out?

I really love the plot to this story. Please continue it!

This book is progressing nicely, I have found one spelling mistake that I thought I show let you know about. The word quitich should be spelt as Q U I D D I T C H.

I am adding you name to my alert list.


From Mark Heffron (PLYMOUTH, GREAT BRITAIN)