Awwwn, so cute! You did a great job, here! Characters discovering their own feelings are the best! Also, everyone feels in-character, I guess Misora can be somewhat aggressive, heh. Thanks for this!

Really good. I enjoyed reading this.

The fight with the virus could be improved, though. He was next to invincible in the beginning, but Rockman and Harp Note easily beat him in their next encounter.

So whatever happened to the virus? I mean, he was invincible, then all the sudden he was destroyed. I was half-expecting you to bring him in again... Well, I think that was good to bring in Misora at the very end.

EVIL Misora! She thinks she's all that... (that's what you want the audience to feel *wink*)

What's with the virus? Seriously, Subaru needs to get a clue. *sigh* boys...

I'm confused about the viruses analysis. What exactly was he saying? Also, the constant running into Subaru is a little repetitive. You should mix it up a bit.

Nice change, we had some action. I see something interesting in the future...

What did War-Rock feel? You have to admit, luna can't seem to get her feelings straight.

Hmm... did Luna rig the results?

^^ Poor Luna and Subaru... neither knows how to communicate. (The only one that does isn't polite!)

O.O Uh-oh. What's she doing? Good job. (Watch switching point of view within scenes).

Both Luna and Misora are a bit (slight understatement) possessive of Subaru. I still prefer Luna over Misora, though. Luna at least has some warranted symapthy.

T.T m, poor Luna! Evil Misora! She knows no bonds...

A very strong finish to a very good story. The best thing about this fan fiction, in my opinion, is the fact that you didn't rush things, but you didn't drag either. Your timing for most things was marvelous. I can't wait to see what you come up with in the future, if you decide to continue writing fan fiction.

The final chapter was well written. Misora's thoughts at the end was a plus.

Though you could have described more about the "feeling" that Luna had been dreaming for years...

A . Added to my favs.