 goldacharmed 1/4/10 . chapter 1This is really interesting. I really really liked it, and your writing style is really great! The only thing I can think of to help you, who let me say is way better then I Would be to not do what I just did above as much. That is to say, having too many of this in the middle of every few paragraphs It's part of organizing your story structure. But other then that, I thought it was great! I loved it! Later dude. |