Maybe I need to read some of your Smallville stories to see what's up with you. The story here is interesting and well told, but I have a little sense of it being rushed. The story could have been developed more, but it reads like you had another idea you wanted to get out. (At least that is my suspicion.)

Not sure about where you chose to end it. I think the abrupt ending without resolution may add to that feeling of being rushed. I wanted a little more resolution. But you also might have been exactly right to stop where you did and leave it up in the air - leave the reader wanting more rather than thinking they've had too much.

KiY

man sorry to see it end, but i enjoyed it thoroughly. there was one or two mixed up words but that was all I could catch. Excellent job.

I'm hoping you were aiming for a funny chapter because this one was funny...very funny.
Ron...you nailed him. You got him exactly right. I could hear his voice and picture his mannerisms throughout this chapter.
Shego was typical Shego. :)
Joss was great and Kim was...Kim.
Great short story.

Come on, he's a guy, it's mandatory to ask that kind of question. I mean seriously... are they green?

Gotta admit though, Ron is very wise. He nailed it on the head right from the start... once he got over the initial image... nice image... umm... ahem... yes, very wise he is.

Eagerly awaiting more!

Since my school blocks KPSH, I'm reviewing here. (IT's bluetigress btw)

Nice story! I love the fact someone's using Joss. Ans Oh, wth is Shego doing there? ;) Can't wait for more!

Cool chapter. Ron is our...typical...Ron. :)
Loved the ending of this chapter.

nice I love the ending. I can only imagine whats goig nto happen next. Sounds like a great story is in the making and I plan to keep reading.

nice twist, and it certainly explains Ron's hyper-paranoid state at the moment.

Joss definitely needs to work on her lesbian slang though :P no self-respecting femme would call that top a wife-beater, and of course using dirty words like "queer", what next, the "D" word? ;)

Am curious where Shego has been these years gone by it its seven years down the road and she didn't go back to merc work. Looking forward to more...

Interesting premise. I like the ease with which Shego keeps going through life and seems to be not at all worried about Joss turning up. (and I love the nickname)

Great job on Joss' accent as well. I can practically hear it in my head, and that's no mean trick for a non-English speaker who only hears rural US English on TV or from the movie ;)

You got me hooked. eagerly awaiting more.

hm, kinda heavy on backstory, but it seems like this fic is going to need it... it's an interesting concept of having shego/joss, I'm not to sure about the age difference, but to each their own. Why oh why was Shego visiting Kim?

very cool story. Can't wait to read more

hmm, that's a somewhat different combination.
After chapter 2, I'm a little confused about the chronological order of events though ...

Nice. Very nice. Shego and Joss. Cool. Never would have thought of putting the two of them together. :)

whelp, you already know I enjoyed it and await more of them... joss is way under-used sadly... i wonder how old she turns out to be in this.

nice, another great joss/shego in the making. Can't wait for MOAR!

You do a good job of softening that drawl. Though the age seperation is a bit bewildering. I am more than willing to accept the "This is the story accept it." line but not many others are. That is about my only nit-pick on this work.

Thanks!