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Oooo, this has much promise to be an interesting read! I'm excited to keep reading!
I will say, though, that there were a few errors that I noticed along the way, but nothing too big. But other than those, it was really good!

I must totally agree with the sentiments expressed by Severus about how the children were
given a detention then told to go somewhere there normally expressily forbidden to go into
forest at such a late hour too...for being out of there dorms late at night teachers set a
detention also late at night,,,duh! Stupid or what!

Though I don't feel that Hagrid is fully to blame because all of the Hogwarts staff know what the gamekeepers like yet they didn't take this into consideration. Because someone should have told Hagrid if he needed to spilt the children up during the search for the unicorn then he should have another "responsible" member of staff with him in order to porperly watch that number of children & to keep them same from the many dangers that
lurk within the forbidden forest? Why is it that Severus seems to be only member of
staff that does seem to take Harry's safety seriously...whilst other adults seem to be
continually undermining his efforts to keep Harry safe?

Beautifully written.

:)

Guten Morgen! Wenigstens ist es Morgen für mich. Haben Sie die Geschichte selbst übersetzen? Ich versuche, in deutscher Sprache zu lesen, dann in Englisch. Wurde der bisherige Satz richtige?
Entschuldigung! Ich lerne deutsch im Schule und ist es meine veirte Jahre.

I loved this story and I am so happy that it even has a sequal! Yay!

like it so far

Fabulous!

Loved the whole thing, especially Severus' growing humanity.

I'll be checking out the sequel :)

(Sorry won't let me sign in) thanks for recomending the story. Okay here is my observation of this story. Its good I like it but its like millions of others out there. So predictable they find out yet still send him back. I never did a story like that for that reason. Its been done to death. If that happened in real life thered be no hope for the world.

I'd have had severus adopt harry in the muggle world. That way the ministry couldn't get involved. Muggle documents are just as binding.

Don't get me wrong I really liked it I'm a big sev fan! I've read them all and its why I wanted to start writing to do stories different from everyone else. Not in the beginning I wrote what everyone else liked until I got confident enough to write what I truly wanted to.

Hey there's hope to make them different right? There's sequals to come! ;) and I shall read them. I'm sorry if I've upset you its not my intention.

Debs

What an interesting first chapter. I really like your portrayal of both Harry and Severus.

I'm hooked.

ok i like this story, but WHY WHY WHY does Harry bloody well 'hang his head' in every other paragraph

ahh lol sorry i do llike this story,that just got my irritaed

( sorry for spell mistakes.)

Good story!

oooh excellent interaction, plotline and use of the original story. I really enjoyed reading this one, thanks.

wonderful story - and great job on the English translation - going right now to read sequel.

My only critique is that you had Snape discover Harry's wandless magic but after that night of detention it isn't mentioned again in the story.