 Morning-Sunset 11/3/09 . chapter 1Firstly because it was annoying me, dialogue is spelt with a u-e after the g. Secondly because that wasn't meant to offend you but I tend to be obsessive, I'd like to say that I really liked this.
I have a preference for whimsical/eerie oneshots myself so well done!
However, I think that the ...'s after "We all" detracted from the sentence as a whole. It would have worked fine by itself.
Don't take my critiques severely because I try and be honest and I do like this- I'm a walking progress myself.
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