Hm... Typically I'm not too thrilled about stories with OC's, because they're rarelly described in a good way, but for now, I'll let it slide.
Apart from the odd gramatical error every now and then like "The voice of HER" which could just as well have been said(gramatically correct) "HER voice", the story is touching and interesting.
Keep it yaoi (and variations of it) free, and I'll be rooting around for this little story.
I'll put it on the alert list for now. Post a few more chapters so I can see where this story is going, and I may have a place in my fav list with it's name on it.