AW! So cute!! hee hee awesome job!! =P

it did make some sense...it was cute...it kinda reminded me of those visa commercials, i was waiting for they part where u say timeless of sumthing like that lol idk y? good storry though!

i swear that was so sweet my tooth cld drop . :D brilliant story ! xD

Yes, it made beautiful sense. I know it sounds corny but it's true if you put it in thier perspective (which isn't real I am seriously not being a majer TentenxNeji fan right now ok) they lived a hard life training until they couldn't move, to scared to tell each other that they are in love with each other, and then at the end they are married with two children, (as you said) a loving grandfather, a home ( obviuosly cause he is a Hyuuga), and each other. Still very beautiful in my perspective very good in alot of ways though I dont want you stare to long at the computer at it so I just leave it at this spelling & grammer is too aswome, the story line is absolutely perfect and the characters are pretty simular to the real characters in the tv show, good job.
Thank You
From: MIB

OMG so cute. I absoulutley loved it!

oo la la. love is in the air hm?

I loved it when neji said "being sexy, I suppose" *does funny eyebrow thing* so smexy of him ;]

to be honest, the /suggestive/ parts made me think of tenten as some cheap hoe because it didnt state that they were /married/ until the end. but then again, isnt it your job to surprise us readers? ;]

anyway very cute, loved it, keep writing stories like this xD

That was really cute^^

Keep up the aweomse work, kay?

I liked it, its about time I find a good fluffy nejiten fic :)

In a word, gorgeous. Had my jaw dropped for a full thirty seconds for a bit there, but what the heck? The tiny details are pretty much akin to those tiny pinches of ... [waves ambiguously] good things that you find every once in a while, and they're delicious. :P

*Kat

Not bad. But, lets return to our regular fan fiction.