 Lord sivart 1/30/12 . chapter 39 There's a cliffhanger i wasn't expecting. I wonder what happens to Nabiki and Ranma now. |
 chaosglory626 12/5/11 . chapter 7Now Nabiki just needs to be bitten by a radioactive spider. |
 Dave 8/20/11 . chapter 39 Ever going to update? |
 l-101 6/13/11 . chapter 39I wasn’t expecting that end. Nabiki discovered his secret ? Nabiki ? Poor Ranma.
The rest was too short to say anything about it. |
 Sir Thames 5/11/11 . chapter 39Good writing here, mate. Spot on. |
 Ganheim 5/11/11 . chapter 39shrugged non-chalantly and[The hyphen seems extraneous
mutant pheromone wouldn't need[pheromone, you
Reo used his Alice[I thought he didn’t like that expression?
Now Akane teeth ground together[For a passive construction, “Akane’s teeth”, though I generally prefer a more active “Akane ground her teeth
to murder, death, and kill him.[That doesn’t sound good, either metaphorically or semantically
Tens of thousand of[thousands
Good to see that you're still writing, and that the main plot(s) are advancing. I think one of the issues earlier is that no plots could really advance because nothing with any apparent lasting impact showed. Just bit players making cameos. Fortunately, it looks like that's going to be changing for a while. |
 Radio Driver 4/30/11 . chapter 39Good goin, DB. Keep on keepin on. |
 luger 7 4/28/11 . chapter 39This chapter rocked! Party on, dude! |
 Wonderbee31 4/27/11 . chapter 39Whoa, neaT to see Hate-Monger in action here, and also golad to see Akane back to normal without killing anyone, as it might well have destroyed her spirit imo, though now with Nabs being in on the secret, can't wait to see what happens next with Ranma and her. |
 Cylon One 4/27/11 . chapter 39Sooner than I expected but that's great.
And what a great third chapter to this adventure going on right now in Avenging. |
 Sir Thames 4/23/11 . chapter 38Good work here, mate. Spot on. |
 Ganheim 4/21/11 . chapter 38Chapter 37
You can contact me at[QuickEdit has eaten your addresses and URLs
attitude is why cannot[why I
Chapter 38
Someone really need to[needed
Ordinary criminal screwed[criminals
the hinges A gaijin[hinges.
render her immune to her power[to _your_ power?
Amusing, but I’m losing track of the who, what, where, and why. With all of the mixing of fandoms (many of them I don’t know of), that probably makes keeping them straight a little harder, which is a pity. The fact that none of the "main" plot threads have been touched in more than two chapters is also a little disheartening we're all wondering what's up with the band of misfits. |
 Phantom Dennis 4/20/11 . chapter 25I suspect Kang is Shinji. |
 Phantom Dennis 4/19/11 . chapter 6Ha Ha! Moe-Fu! Also the maneuverings of the sisters helps make the story more interesting. |
 Radio Driver 4/18/11 . chapter 38Good goin, Sommer. Keep on keepin on. |