It's one of the best Ariana/Gellert stories I've ever read.And believe me, I've read almost all of them, here on .
I love your descriptions of Ariana. She has her oddities, but she's not so crazy that she can't say a proper sentence.
Gellert was good, too, but at the end he wasn't convincing. I just don't see him begging or getting shy. But maybe it's just me.
Nevertheless, the story is great.

Magdalena.

:) I loved this, your characterisation of Ariana and the way Gellert's thoughts flowed. Very sweet in a proper way, teenager-ish or so. And I know Aberforth and Albus weren't really portrayed here, but I felt their presence anyway, and knowing what will happen in the future makes this little piece all the more poignant. :D

I think this works, here. You present us with a very disturbed, but on-point Ariana. I really enjoy her eccentricity that borders on mental instability. Aberforth is also characterized well.

I find Albus a little disconcerting. An impetuous youth he may be, and wanting to dismiss his sister's actions boisterously in front of his friend (*cough!* LOL.), but it just seemed a little out of the way for him here. I picture Albus doing that action, but not the way you have it. Perhaps more refined, or creatively? I don't know. It just seemed a touch off.

Gellert's opening reference to Ariana as a creature is excellent, but after that you start to lose the measure of him. He can have a heart, sure, but there also has to be that kind of cold, calculating-ness that lured him to the power that Albus soon came to despise. I think you missed that part of Gellert here, but what you have holds up a nice part of his personality that I did enjoy.

Again, you hit a home run with Ariana in this one. She truly is delightful. :)

Great work.

Keep writing!

So pretty, and so very sweet. I love fics from Dumbledore's adolescence.