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crystalwolfberri
2009-06-27 . chapter 1
haha, old habits die hard.
(3 too cute! the girls were freaking me out, but I can see them doing this after all is said and done. lol, and Naruto and Sasuke will argue over everything. -rolls eyes-
"Let’s end this quickly. There is no doubt I have the most tragic past compared to all four of you combined. Now that this matter is settled, will you please get out of my office?"
lmbo, too true! XD way to take charge, Gaara! ;)
call-me-orange
2009-04-21 . chapter 1
one thing. i think hinata is with kiba not naruto. wanna know y? cause im hinata and i love kiba *thinks- he's so cute,sigh*
plus ive senn them in the pics and there a realy cute couple

ok gtg bye bye! 8)
Nelfan
2009-03-17 . chapter 1
Go for the sand coffin Gaara!!XD
the blanket
2008-12-04 . chapter 1
Haha. Very cute! As silly as it might be, hoping for it at this stage of the manga, I still want this for them. :)
chaosdaydreamer
2008-10-10 . chapter 1
that was really cool. :)) make more!
PhoenixSong4232
2008-08-09 . chapter 1
yeah i'm reviewing...again. CUTE! I love all these pairings though i'm more of a shikatema then shikaino...whatever doesn't matter i like both. Awesome job, i would love it if Gaara sand coffined Sasuke's ass...sorry. Once again awesome job!
Zephyr.Camida
2008-06-07 . chapter 1
Tehe this was a cute fic I cant believe i didnt review this one. XD So now I'm reviewin this cause it was very cute :3
I like how all my favorite couples were in this story...I loved
them all!! I thought it was funny how they were all argueing in the end and Gaara is just like "WTF people i had a harder life than you people put together now get out!!" that was freaking funny XD SO now...are you gonna be writing more happy gaara/matsuri fics? *nudge nudge*
Alyana
2008-05-10 . chapter 1
Have you ever heard "Your Mistake" by Sister Hazel? It really makes me feel GAAMATSU! madness, since it can be both of them thinking the same thing of each other.

Bya's mentioned that you liked "Bleeding Love" by Leona Lewis. I'n't GRATE? XD

Well, that was wonderful! Gaara and Matsuri really need more love! -runs off to read the rest of your fics-
Nymyrra
2008-03-16 . chapter 1
Sand Coffin Sasuke, Gaara! Yay!

. . . *ahem*

Well done. I liked the last paragraph.
Misfit band geek
2008-03-03 . chapter 1
I like it alot! it sounds like me and my friends! tee hee! hope yo make more stories like this!
Gaara's Teddy 666
2008-03-02 . chapter 1
nice!!^^
funyy-ish...uh,yay?


Tunz uv Luvz!
Gaara's Teddy 6
IchikoKitsuneKoumori
2008-02-25 . chapter 1
Why would they brag about that?!
Tsuki Yuuki
2008-02-19 . chapter 1
Oh gods, I can't breathe. XDD I'm laughing too hard. Oh man. Fantastic - I'm nearly dying laughing over here, haha. XD

I didn't see any comments about not wanting constructive criticisms, so here goes... I'll just mention a couple things - if you want more detail, well, you know where to find me. :D

Overall, your writing is quite good, both style and mechanics, but there were a few things I noticed. You use a lot of epithets, and while that isn't bad, per se, they should be used in moderation. People are used to reading the character's names, so their eyes will skim over them and acknowledge them, but with epithets can distract from a story. There's a few places you were a little redundant as well, i.e. "A deep voice inquired coolly in question"; 'inquired' is enough to tell the reader that the speaker (Gaara) is asking a question, as one doesn't inquire with a statement.

There was some more stuff, but I don't want to, like, call you on all of it right here, because that seems excessive. If you want me to go into more detail, just ask. :D

And I really DID love this, by the way. XD I seriously laughed my ass off.
Cold Desert
2008-02-14 . chapter 1
defenitely Gaara has the most tragic past, that part of the story was hilarious, I love your stories
Kzdatgurl
2008-02-13 . chapter 1
this was so cute. Naruto and Sasuke crack me up all time. they are jus like Ino and Sakura. but great piece. *winks*
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