This fic was just amazing. I could hear Snake's voice in my head the whole time. I wanted more Snarcy but this is really good.

I loved it!

God, I freakin' love the detail that you give. You take the ordinary and you make it so much more extreme...AMAZING!

Can't wait for your next chapter!

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Your talent astounds me. I find myself getting lost in your description, just swept away by it all... every sentence is like poetry. I'm in awe. And the ending to this chapter was just perfect, seriously perfect -- "her name wrong and right on my outbound breath." I can't wait for more!

This stream of consciousness is perfectly done. I love the Snake-voice you have here...it's just -perfect-.

I love it. It reminds me of something in my English class that I'd have to pick apart and analyze...Everything is so deep!!

Keep it up, it's awesome.

-Maeve

I'm actually very surprised to see another chapter because I thought for sure this was a oneshot. I'm intrigued to see where you will take this. All of your description is so captivating -- it's weird to be in Snake's head like this, seeing everything through his eyes. I'm really picking up on a sort of lonely desperation, the way he comments on everyone else without thinking too much about himself. I especially love the Dickens reference. Plot-wise, not too much seemed to happen here, but I hope you're setting us up for something big!

Once I started reading this, I just couldn't stop. It was breathtaking. The voice you gave Snake is realistic and raw, which I really admire. I agree with mellifluous_cloud, the words were fluid, seductive, perfect. :)

Oh my god. Wow. This is not how I've ever imagined Snake's inner voice, but I definitely think it could be. I love your writing style -- it's very seductive. The description is so fluid and gorgeous and perfect. I loved this.

"We were all breakable, though." - Amazing.

This fic is, in a word, perfect. Absolutely perfect. I love your Simpson voice here, and the looks to both the past and the future. Excellent.

I like how open you where with this, you brought Mr. Simpson's actions and thoughts to life and captivated the readers.

Very well written, cannot to read more of your stories.