A remarkable chapter here

Great chapter, nice pace and good show of emotion. I can't wait to see what happens next to Ezel. Ok got to run so this is the faceless signing out.

Awesome chapter yo

nice! love the climactic parts and that last part
whew that seriouslly leaves a guy wondering about what happens next
sorry about the short review on the tenth year but i just was so excited on reading this one
cant wait for the next chapters!

i love it !

Nice, NOW GET BACK TO WORK YOU TWO!

update please

Nice story so far. I like the new outifts the characters get.

also, SaveTheQueen is a Knightsword, not a Greatsword.

Nice update. And to tell you the truth, I'm having my exams, too!

yay hope there will be romance between Marche and Ritz.

OK: This chapter got some things off to a start, which is important, but I do have some minor things.

The new clanners, what do they look like? All we got were 1 or 2 job discriptions, the races and little else.

Also, I really like the detail you put into what Marche and Ritz were wearing.

Not sure about changing the race limitations on jobs myself, especially the blue mage moogle.

(Blue magic is a combination of Black and White magic. The black magic mutates the body, allows the caster to use abilities he otherwise cannot do, while the white magic reverses and heals the body, returning it to normal.)

Since moogles can't learn white magic (Don't ask me why, I cant find that reason anywhere, but I'd assume it's because their mentality doesn't allow for it, IE: Prefer machinery, black magic and natural magic.

But it's your story, just putting it out there fyi.

Otherwise, this is shaping up to be really good.

PS: You can't call someone a Gold Knight if his armour is red and his cape is gold. If it were reversed then sure, but I can't see myself calling someone a gold knight in the above situation. But again, Its your story.

Whoa! Montblanc change voices! I wonder what will it sound like...

I like this story, its got a good flow and the characters all get their turn to do stuff.

A few things though:
Marche is meant to be the 'Golden Knight' but he wears blue armour?
Personally, I think it can be fix with a simple description change : Marche looked at the gleaming sapphire armor, the Maximillian, lying on his bed, golden engraving's covering the edges of the armour.

Second: Wasn't Ritz the one 'Blessed of the Moon'? I was under the impression that Viera were of nature and Moogles were of the moon.

Lastly: I love that excalibur, but i want to see a little more detail for it: the pommel is a jewel? The hilt is a simple cross shape? or has it got a curve towards the blade?

Other than these minor details, I cant see anything else going bad.

Keep up the good work!

awesome ^_^

I like the new chapter. Very nice touch indeed. Maybe I should add one to my story too? Anyways I'll be here to read your story from start to finish and comment along the way. I won't however(unless glaringly obvious) say much about the grammer and what not. Don't be afraid to drop a review on my story! Until Chapter 5 I suppose.

~Vulcan