Love this story! Even though its only two chapters I laughed so much! I like...well everything! I can't really narrow it down. Already there's a good pliot, characters with unique personalities...everything! Please update again soon!

Good chap. Loz is starting to get a little creepy...=O

Wow, I completely busted my guts laughing at the part where Riku ends up blurting the exact opposite of what he'd meant to say, you know, where he goes, "I love it." Curse those voices!

PAINE! Wow, the ending was awesome dude! It was pretty neat how you wrote the part where Riku sees Paine's reflection in the puddle water, its was awesome! luved it!

Update soon!!

This chapter was awesome!! I love the flow of it. Yes, I can totally picture Riku and the others as brothers lol.

Things I liked: the use of characters.
Things I didn't like: Rikku [lol]
Suggestions: Update faster, please XD
Fav. part: I liked the part where he was talking to the inner self of him lol. I really like that idea.

So far so good. I really want to know what happens. Oh and I like the title!

Oh god, im getting a feeling that riku's car is going to get smashed...

I love this chapter! (or story for that matter) And the name, i dont even lnow what paroxysm is, in spite of the definition in front of me. only wanting more Sora,though,cuz, well, Sora's cool.

~InterestinglyPsychotic

The pain will start when Riku goes home.. i can't dare to watch... but you know... Paine and Riku wouldn't be bad or FuuxRiku

haha cool you added paine to the story!
lol yeah sory is kinda stupid with computers.
this was really good, your stories keep giving and giving, they make me feel like i'm there like the volleyball scene and when paine is drawing in her book. lol keep up the awesome work!!

So... I see you finally created a second chapter to your story! It's a little bit dark, but that's what makes it fit for Riku! And you're right. Sora's adorable!

As requested, here are my suggestions/likes/dislikes etc.

Likes:
- The internal monologue, one of the few aspects I like about writing that is in first point of view. It's definitely been used to great effect here, very funny.
- The Riku-humiliation! xD Keep it comin', please.
- The fact that the pairing is Riku and Kairi. (Okay, that's just personal opinion but you still get brownie points from me for that.)
- Structure seems sound.

Didn't really have any dislikes, well, none that immediately comes to mind anyway.

Suggestions:
- There were a few grammatical errors, but I only noticed this around the second/third time I read the story (yes, me like this fic a lot), i.e. "shot" instead of "shoot", "worst" instead of "worse". I wouldn't worry about it too much though, they were hardly noticeable.
- As this is an AU, it's only expected that the characters will be at least a little bit OOC. So far, I think it's still a little too early to judge yet, however I would be careful labelling it as such (OOC, that is), because this actually deters many potential readers and reviewers. I had to find that out the hard way. Just a friendly tip.

Favourite line:

Bad Riku: Freak, stop looking at my future girlfriend!

Hope you find this review helps, even a little. As for the length of this chapter, I thought it was ideal, pretty much everything Allstargamer said about it. Oh um, also, I noticed you had Riku referring to his brothers as brother Number 5, 4, and 3. Is this an indication that we're going to be introduced to brother Number 1 anytime soon (I'm presuming Riku's No. 2)? *Squeal* Will it be Sephiroth? I hope so.

Phew! I'm done now! Sorry for the long eyesore, but I'm hoping this will encourage you to write chapter two. I'm greatly looking forward to it. =D

it's awsome update more

Wow, this was really good. I liked the idea of Riku and Yazoo, Loz, and Kadaj in the story. I havent read anything like this before.

Its really ironic that Riku got farther away from Kairi than getting closer like he wanted to.

:D

Things i liked: the contrast between riku and his brothers., and the mix of talking to more characters in the story.

Things not liked: well i liked that you put rikku in there but you could of made her really energetic like she is in the game. other than that i liked it a lot.

Suggestions: Hm? well i liked the good/bad riku but it kindda gets in the way at times.

comments: i really enjoyed reading this and i think you can come up with more enjoyable chapters to follow..so i say keep going with it.

Fav Part: well i think my fav part was the constant arguing with his brothers and making loz cry. lol. and i really liked how you make everything come alive. i can imagine everything that happened to riku, especially his nasty breakfast.

this story is good so far! Update more!

Well, good one, but I don't like Riku too much. Still, let's see how this will turn out.